Valsa George

Haiku. Streams (5-7-5) - Poem by Valsa George

Fair dancing maidens
With jingling silver anklets
Rushing down the slopes

Topic(s) of this poem: haiku

Comments about Haiku. Streams (5-7-5) by Valsa George

  • Wes Vogler (1/23/2016 1:18:00 AM)

    Quite beautiful Valsa slap one more syllable into L3 and perfect
    great picture
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    Valsa George (1/23/2016 3:08:00 AM)

    It was an inadvertent error. Now only I noticed it.... I actually meant 'Rushing down the slopes'.'The' was unfortunately left out. Thanks for pointing it out! I will edit it now itself!

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  • Kumarmani Mahakul (10/28/2015 12:57:00 AM)

    Nicely painted. Enjoyed with photo provided.Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

  • Tirupathi Chandrupatla (10/27/2015 11:51:00 AM)

    I can feel the lovely maidens walking as the stream flows. (Report) Reply

  • Roop Rekha Bhaskar (10/27/2015 6:17:00 AM)

    to put all of nature in three sentences and feel it - that is beautiful. (Report) Reply

  • Rajendran Muthiah (10/27/2015 4:24:00 AM)

    Streams of water are dancing girls and the silver anklets are the white lather/sliding down of molten ice. Excellent.
    . The third line, rushing down the slopes has 5 syllables showing a live picture.
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  • Sanjukta Nag (10/27/2015 3:13:00 AM)

    jingling silver anklets
    What a beautiful metaphor! I can hear the sound. Amazing one.
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  • Ari Alsio (10/27/2015 3:00:00 AM)

    Potential when it wonderful and the narrative haiku, a rare specimen, thanks Valsa. (Report) Reply

  • Kelly Kurt (10/27/2015 1:19:00 AM)

    A perfect description, a perfect haiku! (Report) Reply

  • (10/27/2015 1:02:00 AM)

    I can hear the anklets against the babbling of the stream
    Thanks Valsa-10
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  • Rajnish Manga (10/27/2015 12:17:00 AM)

    Looks like a gushing stream has taken over the form of an heavenly muse to mesmerize the entire valley where it flows. A touch of our great poet Kalidasa. Thanks. (Report) Reply

    Valsa George (10/27/2015 12:38:00 AM)

    Your comment has made my haiku more beautiful! Thank you Rajnish sir!

  • Mohammed Asim Nehal (10/26/2015 11:59:00 PM)

    Nice picture painted with this haiku, great imagery yet again. (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, October 26, 2015

Poem Edited: Saturday, January 23, 2016

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