Heart Beat____/\/\__/\_/\_____/\_________________ Poem by Jessica Elizondo

Heart Beat____/\/\__/\_/\_____/\_________________

Rating: 3.5

(Beep, beep) ...(beep, beep) ......I gave you my heart, and put it in your hand. You looked deep into my eyes, and crushed it. As blood ran down your arms, you laugh and throw whats left on the cold, hard ground. My body shivers. Why? I ask.I look deep into your eyes, but they're clod with no love in sight. I'm confused. I thought you loved me? I feel faint and I can hear you laughing as I fall to the ground. I close my eyes, for my heart is dead...(beep, beep) ...I hear the nurse say, ' it's gonna take a miricle to revive her.' I get ready to take my last breath, but all of a sudden I feel loving arms around me. He picks me up and puts me back on my feet. He tells me that it's over now. I watch in amazment as he gets down on his hands and knees, and picks up all of the fragments of my broken heart, and puts it back together. I'm astonished...Iv'e never seen love like this. He is my miricle.....I'm telling you this because he loves me, and you just pretended like I wasn't even there, but yet you say you loved me.I guess part of that mistake was my fault, because I believed you. As far as I'm concerned, I'm way better off without you. He loves me and constantly reminds me that I'm his girl. He doesn't want to be with anybody else but me. Whenever I see him, I can't stop smiling. Whenever he holds me, I feel as though I'll faint. Whenever he whispers in my ear, 'Babe, I love you. And I don't want to be with anyone else, ' I feel like I can't breathe, because he takes my breath away. Your just A child, but he's my man. My heart is healed with no thanks to u.__/\/\_____/\/\___/\/\___/\/\_/\/\_/\/\_/\/\_/\/\_/\/\_

Aury Cecile 27 May 2008

What a great way to describe the pain which some people go through! Great job, I really enjoy this poem and your style of writing. I think it's interesting how you add in the beeping and what people around the person are saying, it gives a lot more feeling to the poem and a sense that your the one witnessing it all happening. I'll be excited to read you next one. If you have the time, please read over one or two of my own poems. I would love to hear your input.

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Serenity Prayer 27 May 2008

awwww. its so sweet and cute. i love it! ! !

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Emancipation Planz 27 May 2008

An appropriate place I hope to ask that you all take the time to think of 2 of PoemHunter's very special - Alison Cassidy and her Jerry Hughes who is undergoing major heart surgery now.... aroha Deana

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Anna jonson 03 September 2008

whatt a poem....i like the illustration it's a new idea of writing the name of a poem enjoyed

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Blue Eyes 19 June 2008

i like the poem it is about giving love without waiting for anything in return

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Greenwolfe 1962 30 May 2008

I like the heartbeat illustration. It demonstrates creativity. This is really a letter to a former lover. It contains what you might expect. There is one new element. The detailed description of a new love. This is usually not put in such detail in a letter of this kind, no doubt, with some satisfaction born of love and not revenge. In the best tradition of a glorious love. GW62

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Catherine Rica Cosico 27 May 2008

Sweet....for a teenager like you...I would say you must not rush things out...Just your take time...enjoy life! ! ! Life is such a beautiful place to live in...it is a gift and we must all value that... Sometimes we think that 'he' is the one but turns out not to be in the end...Be strong! ! ! Stay strong! ! !

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