I am here surviving lonely
I have to talk with no body
I miss my pair, I need some one beside
I can’t live alone, with out you by my side
Because I miss you surely
Being apart the worst thing in the world
Which hurts inside and never wide my mind
Which kills my pride, I can’t be smart
I can’t able to improve but I lost what I got
Because of your love, because I miss that
In my precious world the love of mine
If you are not by my side am not going to shine
I will be suffering; I will always be in pain
So why you are leaving me alone, if you have nothing to gain
Because I am going to miss you and I will be crying
Either you left me with someone which console me by your name
Or you were to stay by my side permanently and play the game
You let me fall for you as vast as I can’t able to think
Now I got confused that I might be not walking but sink
Because I miss you, don’t you think?
This is a nice write, but please dont take offence, as I welcome all comments negitive and positive, I think if you look back at some of your sentences, they would sound better if you added the proper adjectives/adverbs ect.... It sort of sounds in many sentences like part of it is missing, now if this was your intent, well, than, it was done well, it is an ejoyable read about now living without the other half of you, ...... Bonnie
'Now I got confused that I might be not walking but sink Because I miss you, don’t you think? ' Love is the core emotion that is composed in a lovely manner. 10+
This is so sad, yet it is done with tender feelings. You have written what every woman feels at one time or another through her life. This is a very good message to send to men too, letting them know what we want and what we need. A 10+++++ and thank you for sharing. Love & hugs, Barbara
it seems as if your sending this with someone in mind, which makes it even better. because it came dirrectly from your heart. which makes it awesome to read.
In my precious world the love of mine If you are not by my side am not going to shine I will be suffering; I will always be in pain..........both have definite part to play and are compleiment to each other.it is quaite natural feeling and honest one too....10 rad mine come home....home bound....no separate ways.....
guys dont u think in the coming future the name of this young girl will become very famous? as for me im sure of that. being that young and to write such thoughtful poems in such simple and easy readiable way. amazing!
Love missing a lot there...your words bring out well the pain and grief inside...good poem Luwi...10
wow its a good poem and I went through your few more poems and liked them...means you are a good poet and sure you are... hope you like my poetry too and your long comments will be added to my new book soon and book will be in your hand too... yours..afzal shauq
A love lost and a heart fractured leaving a pain with each new heartbeat. A very detailed expression here, with a bit of polishing you are going to be a very good poet
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
great poem.......nice concept too...thnx