poet Hasmukh Amathalal

Hasmukh Amathalal

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I Miss

You may call me dear
Agony and pain you bear
No complaints or words I hear
Why not you make it very clear?

You always guided me as sun beam
Projected work as complete team
Life would have been utterly failure
If you had not made it fully secure

I am paying it very dearly
I miss the death very nearly
Cry from distance makes me upset
Nothing seems right from the outset

I may not deliver any good
My promises may not serve as tonic for food
How to prove and show the earnest feeling?
I can’t shed the tears even if willing?

The world, people and nature will laugh at me
They will find it as stage to be enjoyed free
Can we not present its beautiful look?
This s only way to come out of hook

Let not any one notice the plight?
We may not separate or go out of sight
What is the reason feel bad or fight?
We may choose what we feel is right

I am visibly moved
My apprehensions still not removed
I am carried away by the simple sentiments
They are not sad but glorious moments

Love is to give and sacrifice
Words may not prove or suffice
It will be simple trajectory of mind
May prove any time its essence and kind

Poem Submitted: Friday, November 6, 2009

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  • Yll LYll L (4/22/2010 11:41:00 AM)

    wow! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
    i love the rhyming playing with it stunningly...
    the thoughts how it erodes....

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  • Iron Panda 23™ (3/23/2010 8:53:00 AM)

    this is great! !

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  • Unwritten SoulUnwritten Soul (2/27/2010 11:36:00 PM)

    Love is to give and sacrifice
    Words may not prove or suffice
    It will be simple trajectory of mind
    May prove any time its essence and kind
    ...yes i love this one, this is real unwritten soul...love it 10+++

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  • Precious Arroyo (1/31/2010 9:43:00 PM)

    this is a great poem you have a great way with words i give this poem 10+++

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  • Adam ReedAdam Reed (1/26/2010 6:30:00 PM)

    very strong ending to a powerful poem. good tone and mood setting. good job hasmukh

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  • Marcella D (1/10/2010 7:38:00 AM)

    um very good of a poem you have here

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  • Kelvin Karani (1/8/2010 12:29:00 AM)

    Love is to give and sacrifice
    Words may not prove or suffice
    It will be simple trajectory of mind
    May prove any time its essence and kind


    mh! i like this

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  • Flames Of Desire Consumed By The Fire (1/1/2010 6:49:00 PM)

    Such interesting construction of words...I'm more of a plainly spoken person than a complication of words. Still, I felt somewhat of a connection to it's meaning. You clearly have mastered the word of poetry to my knowledge. If I'm unable to fathom it wholly, It usually means I've found a more skilled, intelligent one than myself. Grand job.

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  • Prince Obed de la CruzPrince Obed de la Cruz (12/29/2009 9:42:00 PM)

    aaaa - first verse

    abab - second verse up to the last.

    yeah... it's good to vary the rhyme patterns. We're in modern days... well done!

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  • Kassiah Gervaise (12/23/2009 9:19:00 PM)

    ...i didn't care for it much.

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  • Adriana Ellis (12/1/2009 5:14:00 PM)

    This one is my favorite

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  • Louis RamsLouis Rams (11/17/2009 9:46:00 PM)

    love is to give and sacrifice.

    very well put. a ten

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  • Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK (11/9/2009 11:25:00 AM)

    ‘…Love is to give and sacrifice…’

    Diamonded adage forgotten mostly, poetically you crammed into me.
    Thanks Sir
    Ten++
    niv

    Please grace with your comments &c to my posts [new too]
    niv

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  • Pitilosi Mdala (11/9/2009 6:30:00 AM)

    You may call me dear, Agony and pain you bear, no complaints or words I hear, Why not you make it.WOO! man this real ting no doubt about it

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  • Brendon Carey (11/8/2009 7:48:00 PM)

    How to prove and show the earnest feeling?
    I can’t shed the tears even if willing?
    - I can see the other side of things from this perspective thank you for recommending

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  • Prince Obed de la CruzPrince Obed de la Cruz (11/8/2009 8:08:00 AM)

    Love is to give and sacrifice
    Words may not prove or suffice
    It will be simple trajectory of mind
    May prove any time its essence and kind


    great! .............................................................

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  • Lady Grace (11/6/2009 10:39:00 PM)

    the presentation is sweet..some lines for this....

    i miss your call every now and then
    your voice..ur voice i want to hear
    i miss every time we talk in phone
    as if we are just talking at home..

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  • rago rago (11/6/2009 10:30:00 PM)

    a good flow of thought and I miss........if I fail to go through................

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