shiny shine

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I Remember - Poem by shiny shine

I remember the night you asked me that special question
It was Christmas eve
I was speechless
You told me to think about it and call you in two days to give you my answer
With my heart pounding I picked up the phone
Slowly dialing your number
Holding my breath
At the sound of your voice I breathed a sigh of relief
You asked if I had an answer I replied yes
You laughed and said thank god
I smiled to myself laughing
You made me promise to tell you when I was mad and tell you when you did something wrong
I warned you of the drama to come
With your ex and my friends
You said we would make it through
Your ex soon found out and she was furious
Supposedly I stole you from her
Even though you two were already broke up
And she was the one who ended it
You told me you loved me
I smiled and said I loved you to
Everything seemed to be going good
On the day of our one month I saw you only once
I was away from school that day
It seemed like twenty days
You called me and told me you loved me
And I said that I did to
Telling you I missed you, hoping you missed me to
Than I told you a secret of my past, a part of me
You didn’t know how to react
Did I say too much? to soon?
This was only a week ago
So why did I have the conversation with you that will be etched into my head for many weeks to come?
You started by saying you didn’t think you were being a true boyfriend to me and it felt like we were just friends
I laughed and told you it wasn’t true
You’ve helped me through so much
No matter what I said
I couldn’t change your mind
You told me you wanted a break
You asked if that was fine
As tears filled my eyes I sobbed fine
You said you were sorry and would stay on the phone as long as possible
You whispered to me things will get better
And we will be together again
The tears fell harder
You still want to be friends
What happened to us getting through everything together?
You say we can’t have a friendship and love
I ask why not?
Isn’t that what makes couples so strong?
You tell me you will love me no matter what
As friend or as your girlfriend
And you are always a phone call away
Before I hang up you say once again that you are sorry
But your apology is to late
The damage is already done
The pain has already set in


Comments about I Remember by shiny shine

  • (3/7/2010 10:29:00 AM)


    *Sigh...
    I've been there before.
    Sorry to hear that such a sad occassion made such a descriptive poem. Nice write, I defnately feel your emotions.
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  • (3/6/2010 7:13:00 PM)


    Very emotional and very descriptive much. I know how it is: -/ nice poem. (Report) Reply

  • (3/6/2010 6:46:00 PM)


    Very good. It seems as if every poem I read hits home lately, concerning the things my friends go through, the things I go through, and the things everybody goes through. I have one friend who keeps trying to find love, but it keeps slipping away... it's tearing her up... But nevermind. Good poem. Good narrative style. (Report) Reply

  • Adam Reed (3/6/2010 2:33:00 PM)


    u got some interesting predicaments... (Report) Reply

  • (2/12/2010 6:36:00 PM)


    very good write (Report) Reply

  • Adam Reed (2/8/2010 2:36:00 PM)


    its poems like this that inspire me to write. great work miss shine lol =) (Report) Reply

  • (2/7/2010 6:11:00 PM)


    It's a very moving poem, I can feel the emotion when I read it. Wonderful. (Report) Reply

  • (2/7/2010 6:08:00 PM)


    wow... um i don't know what too say that is so deep and... wow is all i can say! (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, February 7, 2010



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