Invisible me / Suspicion
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Shadowed existence in my mind
Is impossible to define
Build ideas that shouldn’t be
Invisible me you don’t see
Accusations loudly berate
Realization comes too late
Inconceivable thoughts won’t flee
Invisible me you don’t see
Suspicion soon grows then imparts
Leaving behind a bleeding heart
Contemptuous thoughts plant the seed
Invisible me you don’t see
As distrust grows on vines maligned
Creating doubts that intertwine
A romance end is guaranteed
Invisible me you don’t see
Excellent piece TJ well expressed you are doing well my friend Chris 10 Chris
Wonderful Tj, Your construction of sentences is fantastic. A touching poem. Thanks.
Super excellant poetic expression. You made it a poem dear James.
Excellent kyrielle. Fun to do but the repetitive line had best be a good one. This one was.
I love the last stanza....and the whole piece is brought together nicely with the repitition of 'invisible me you don't see'...nice work
the first two lines eye catching...read good...the repeated use of line 'me you do not see' goes very well with the shadowed existence, spoken of there...a very good poem on love tending to loose support on sagging pillars cold...ten for you TJ
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
your words are so strong & you put them together so very well - this is a very good piece 10