Like Onion Poem by Sonya Florentino

Like Onion

Rating: 4.9


Like onion skin

My skin

Layer upon layer

But thin

You can peel me

But ever so slowly

You will cry

I am sorry

But if it's any consolation

I am crying too

For you are finally seeing me

while I'm


undressing



you


© 2009 Sonya Florentino

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Frank Lambert 18 August 2009

Nice verse, subtle and clever it's also full of layered humour. Frank

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Rakesh Bedi 01 August 2009

......... Wow.......! ! !

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Susan Jarvis 27 June 2009

Beautifully crafted layers of sentiment ending with a wry wink. This poem puts me in mind of Valentine by Carol Ann Duffy - onions rule! ! S ;)

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Duh Huh 19 June 2009

You go girl! ! ! love this poems layers :) It has everything, subtle humor, sensitivity and a pinch of sensuality. Love it. Thank you for sharing.

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Thanks for recommending this to me. But once again, you've shown yourself to be more courageous than me. Don't know if I'm capable of allowing anyone to peel away my layers. Lovely, though, really thought-out and honest, as always with your works. I loved it!

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Brian Jani 03 July 2014

wow, short and subtle yet i realy enjoyed the whole idea behind it

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Patti Masterman 25 September 2009

This is so clever- really! One of the most clever endearing poems ever. So I am not surprised that it was written by you; sometimes all the talent boils itself into a single thing, like it is being distilled..so this is like a fine onion wine..(smile)

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C. P. Sharma 09 September 2009

Sonya, a great unravelling of the self with infinite llayers. Loved it. CP

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William Lindenmuth 25 August 2009

like a search for self, you peel each layer discovering all that you are until you reach the core of your existence. you tend you garden well with words and you continue to grow as a writer

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Lillian Thomas 21 August 2009

A very nice poem, Sonya! The metaphor of an onion you turn almost inside out in the last few lines: 'For you are finally seeing me while I'm undressing you' very clever!

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Sonya Florentino

Sonya Florentino

Manila, Philippines (residing NYC)
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