Brave Ben dreamt he was drowning in the sea
From killer waves, he struggled to be free
He woke up in fright
In the dead of the night
His wife asked- "What made you pee"
This is very funny indeed.......Valsa.......very nicely composed.....wonderful limerick
very funny. really enjoyed..................................................
very funny. really enjoyed..................................................
" From the killer waves, he struggled to free" if you change it to " From killer waves, he struggled to be free" , you keep the correct count and the grammar is better, my dear. humorous. poor wife. why do YOU think Bri and his wife have their own bedS? bri :) yes, my mate pees! ! !
Oh, I didn't know that! Poor Bri.....! So should I change it to Brave Bri, instead of brave Ben? The number of syllables in any case was 10. But I appreciate your suggestion of making 'to free' into 'to be free' and have changed it that way. Thank you for the suggestion!
ok, let's here from this non-asian reader! yeah, i like it as well. how could i not? ? it made me laugh... the last line of course. but who had courage? the man in his dream, OR the woman who was brave enough to ask such a question. maybe both. i've heard of wet dreams, but i think THAT means something else. and i wonder if the wetness on his side of the bed triggered the dream or if the dream triggered the wetness. the old chicken or the egg question. valsa, it's a killer limerick! congratulations! ! BUT..... tell your husband to stop drinking tea four hours before going to bed! ! ! so far i've been lucky enough to wake up in time, thank goodness. sometimes i do dream about peeing before i wake up to trudge to the bathroom. thanks for sharing. to MyPoemList it goes. bri :)
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
bravery in dreams made him pee.................very funny limerick.......i salute your ideas........honestly, it's pleasing...........thanks for sharing it.