poet Valsa George

Valsa George

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Limerick.25. Courage!

Brave Ben dreamt he was drowning in the sea
From killer waves, he struggled to be free
He woke up in fright
In the dead of the night
His wife asked- "What made you pee"

Topic(s) of this poem: dream, limerick

Poem Submitted: Tuesday, November 11, 2014
Poem Edited: Sunday, August 25, 2019

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Comments about Limerick.25. Courage! by Valsa George

  • Oscar (3/16/2020 11:03:00 PM)

    Hi 20characters dude

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (8/23/2019 9:03:00 PM)

    " From the killer waves, he struggled to free"

    if you change it to " From killer waves, he struggled to be free" , you keep the correct count and the grammar is better, my dear.

    humorous. poor wife. why do YOU think Bri and his wife have their own bedS?

    bri

    :)

    yes, my mate pees! ! !

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    Valsa GeorgeValsa George(8/25/2019 7:17:00 AM)

    Oh, I didn't know that! Poor Bri.....! So should I change it to Brave Bri, instead of brave Ben?

    The number of syllables in any case was 10. But I appreciate your suggestion of making 'to free' into 'to be free' and have changed it that way. Thank you for the suggestion!

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  • Mihaela PirjolMihaela Pirjol (12/6/2014 4:40:00 AM)

    Really funny....that last line...wow! A great limerick!

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  • Bri EdwardsBri Edwards (11/26/2014 8:05:00 PM)

    ok, let's here from this non-asian reader! yeah, i like it as well. how could i not? ? it made me laugh... the last line of course.

    but who had courage? the man in his dream, OR the woman who was brave enough to ask such a question. maybe both. i've heard of wet dreams, but i think THAT means something else.

    and i wonder if the wetness on his side of the bed triggered the dream or if the dream triggered the wetness. the old chicken or the egg question.

    valsa, it's a killer limerick! congratulations! ! BUT.....
    tell your husband to stop drinking tea four hours before going to bed! ! ! so far i've been lucky enough to wake up in time, thank goodness. sometimes i do dream about peeing before i wake up to trudge to the bathroom.

    thanks for sharing. to MyPoemList it goes. bri :)

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  • Tribhawan KaulTribhawan Kaul (11/14/2014 7:11:00 AM)

    Ha Ha Ha. Very laughable penning.

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  • Tirupathi ChandrupatlaTirupathi Chandrupatla (11/13/2014 7:43:00 PM)

    Your limericks provide the much needed relaxed laughter. One more nice one. Thank you.

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  • Kumarmani MahakulKumarmani Mahakul (11/12/2014 2:13:00 PM)

    what made you pee'-really it is funny. Nicely penned. Thanks.

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  • Salini Nair (11/12/2014 12:06:00 AM)

    very funny. really enjoyed..................................................

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  • Salini Nair (11/12/2014 12:05:00 AM)

    very funny. really enjoyed..................................................

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  • Deepak Kumar Pattanayak (11/11/2014 12:42:00 PM)

    This is very funny indeed.......Valsa.......very nicely composed.....wonderful limerick

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  • Saheb MohapatraSaheb Mohapatra (11/11/2014 5:58:00 AM)

    bravery in dreams made him pee.................very funny limerick.......i salute your ideas........honestly, it's pleasing...........thanks for sharing it.

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