Valsa George

Limerick-74- Fruit Picking - Poem by Valsa George

To pick berry, Jane n' Joe went down the dale
On Joe's face, there was a wicked smile
Gathering a bag of berry
He stole away in hurry
Left alone, poor Jane began to wail

Topic(s) of this poem: limerick

Comments about Limerick-74- Fruit Picking by Valsa George

  • Bri Edwards (5/28/2018 12:15:00 PM)


    in my first (longest) comment, PH deleted a word i had as the fourth word in the third line. CENSORSHIP! ! ! Or maybe Valsa has that power. :) the word is similar to corny, but starts with an h. let's see if THIS get through unscathed.

    bri :) and yes, i'm submitting.
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  • Bri Edwards (5/28/2018 11:21:00 AM)

    p.s. term=Cherry (Report) Reply

  • Bri Edwards (5/28/2018 11:19:00 AM)

    i like it and it goes to MyPoemList, BUT our minds work much differently: like night 'n' day.

    Fruit Picking.....By Bri

    To pick berry, Jane n' Joe went down the dale,
    and for an hour, with berries, filled a big pail.
    But Joe was, and Jane was so cute,
    and soon Jane was only in her birthday suit.
    Now and then each would chew upon a berry,
    but before too long, Joe took Jane's tender 'cherry'. ...bad-boy-bri :)
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    Valsa George (5/29/2018 4:56:00 AM)

    Yikes........! ! ! ! You have spoiled the whole innocence of the situation! Perverted minds can think only in perverted terms! You really deserve to be beaten up for polluting this site! Though grown old, still you are a 'wicked boy'!

  • Rajnish Manga (11/17/2016 2:10:00 AM)

    The poem has a smart story-line based on childhood mischief. Quite entertaining. Thank you, Valsa ji. (Report) Reply

  • Edward Kofi Louis (1/17/2016 7:22:00 AM)

    Love means peace; but, stealing leads to hatred. Nice work. (Report) Reply

  • Hazel Durham (1/14/2016 10:38:00 AM)

    Great Limerick on childhood pranks that are the building blocks to learn and grow strong! (Report) Reply

  • Mohammed Asim Nehal (1/14/2016 2:55:00 AM)

    ha ha ha nice one...liked it 10++++ (Report) Reply

  • Souren Mondal (1/11/2016 7:13:00 AM)

    Awww.. Poor Jane.. It's always like that, when going gets tough your accomplice abandons you.. A laugh and a meditation at the same time.. Wondeful limmerick Valsa ma'am.. Thank you for sharing.. (Report) Reply

  • Akhtar Jawad (1/10/2016 5:27:00 AM)

    That's the story of childhood when everyone is naughty. I asked Joe to explain his conduct and he told me that Jane was so cute and innocent that even if caught by the gardener she will not be punished. (Report) Reply

  • Kumarmani Mahakul (1/10/2016 3:11:00 AM)

    Gathering a bag of berry in hurry shows wise imagery of busy harvesting. This is also very nicely penned fantastic limerick shared which reflect daily life.10 (Report) Reply

  • Muhammad Imtiyaz (1/8/2016 11:21:00 PM)

    very nice lines depicting human nature.....Human nature can come out from as such a simple activity as fruit picking.... thanks for sharing mam.... (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, January 8, 2016

Poem Edited: Friday, January 8, 2016

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