Man's Immortal Sculpture Poem by omar ibrahim

Man's Immortal Sculpture

Rating: 4.5


Don't try to carve your name on waves of sea
Because you precious time will go in vain
Do not assume that waves in place will be

Look for immortal stone that have no stain
To carve your name and show your precious slog
That is the Blooming toil with fruits to gain

You must be wise or you'll be lost in smog
Our God has showed which is the wrong and right
No wave can crush a stone enclosed with bog

To carve the hardest stone you need great might
You must be patient if for God you yearn
That's why on scenic sculptures they spot light

Then since you run for nearest profit earn
Don't ask yourself why did you lose your turn


28 July,2010

form: terza rima sonnet.'iambic pentameter'.

omaribrahim-keats@hotmail.com

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Mrs.Joseph =) 29 July 2010

Ohh myy such a great poem omar! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ++10! ! ! ! !

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Avery Grant 29 July 2010

definitely a must read!

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Dr Antony Theodore 29 July 2010

To carve the hardest stone you need great might You must be patient if for God you yearn That's why on scenic sculptures they shed light at ur young age u hve so much of wisdom in you and naturally in u r poems. wonderful indeed. thank u for inviting me.

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Deborah Cromer 29 July 2010

Nicely set into the lines of thought. You did well on this. I love that it brings pictures and thoughts to mind while reading it. Thank you for sharing. Deborah

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Prince Obed de la Cruz 30 July 2010

bravo my friend... perfect theme... perfect lines! wow... you amazed me again! nice thoughts here... rated it 10

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Derek Haughton 09 December 2011

An interesting attempt at the set form and a reminder just how difficult it can be to both rhyme and make sense. The line 'No wave can crush a stone enclosed with bog.' is most interesting, as it seems to be saying, to paraphrase, carve your name on a stone, encase it in mucky ground and no wave will break it. A stone 'that have no stain' would soon pick a few up from a bog!

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Shashipriya R Lokanathan 22 August 2010

Very creative & deep.

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Cleide Tatyana Almeida 15 August 2010

Reflective and well written.

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A mature poem. Great imagery wth deep content.Well done! ; D

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Tribhawan Kaul 07 August 2010

Nicely written poem. Keep writing and sharing. As a young lad what do you think of my poems.?

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