Forget Me Not Poem by omar ibrahim

Forget Me Not

Rating: 4.7


Forget-me-not, I felt how fair you be
the pleasing mien of you still haunts my eyes
though I must stay away from where love lies
so many flies they make it hard to see

oh, God has made a flower very fair
your petals are too shiny for a bloom
that God may let you clear the hatred gloom
and splay your scent of peace toward the air

so why do you always forget what's due?
am I so bad that I shall not find you?



Forget-me-not~=~a type of flower
form: iambic pentameter,2 quatrains and a couplet


Omar Ibrahim, June,2010
omaribrahim-keats@hotmail.com

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Hans Vr 25 July 2010

Very good poem. A pleasure to read, like music.

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Okan Emanet 25 July 2010

Soon after reading such a wonderful poem, I have become paralyzed.... The name of the poem really affected me... A great masterpiece...

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Samantha Collins 26 July 2010

wonderful poem. favorite lines: 'so why do you always forget what's due? am I so bad that I shall not find you? ' reallly does good to the poem. keeep writting! (:

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A well expressed poem. Good poetic language, well done; D

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Lynn Glover 27 July 2010

I'am very impressed by this poem being written by someone so young. You have done an excellent job. Keep up the good work. Lynn

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Siddartha Montik 12 November 2016

..the pleasing mien of you still haunts my eyes though I must stay away from where love lies... oh, God has made a flower very fair your petals are too shiny for a bloom... Real Loving Lines! Thanks for the Lines and expressions! Siddartha Montik!

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Derek Haughton 09 December 2011

Again, a good attempt at the set form, it follows the script precisely, and shows how difficult it can be to get it right. 'I felt how fair you be.' This phrase could only be acceptable in the mouth of a comedic peasant! What 'flies' make it hard to see, in the context of the poem?

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Siddartha Montik 23 August 2011

well written, Nature's daily blossom expressed in Flowers, yes slowl revealings thru the dew of early mornings! yes for a 9!

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Louis Cecile 20 September 2010

I concur the ending is very strong and makes the good poem. Excellent work.

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Apathetic Genius 05 September 2010

well done! I like it

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