omar ibrahim

Rookie (16/9/1994 / cairo / Egypt)

Plants In Agony - Poem by omar ibrahim

I am a flower who lived in peace
in a garden which looked very much like heaven
but the gardener planted some noxious weeds
the weeds bribed the foolish gardener

the weeds broke flowers' thorns as they grew strong
no weeding or mulch can stop their tenacity
the gardener is treating the flowers as weeds
the weeds bribed the foolish gardener

the garden is now full of fallen leaves
the grass is changing from green to yellow
while the gardener does not seem to care
the weeds bribed the foolish gardener

the plants are trying to survive
while the weeds are bound to exhaust themselves
the gardener knows it, but he's trying to forget
the weeds bribed the foolish gardener


February/2010_Omar Ibrahim
revised by: MR.Ronald Peat

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Comments about Plants In Agony by omar ibrahim

  • Derek Haughton (12/9/2011 5:12:00 AM)


    A trifle too obscure for my limited intellect, 'the weeds broke the flowers thorns', what does that mean, I know of flowering plants with thorns chaenomeles japonica for instance, but weeds tough enouugh to break the thorns? (Report) Reply

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  • (7/30/2010 1:06:00 PM)


    This a good modern version of the papable of the sower.i like it n added it to my favouritez. (Report) Reply

  • Hans Vr (7/25/2010 10:41:00 AM)


    Wow, I think that is a great poem. Very strong poem with strong and original imagery. Reading it, I was thinking of the corrupt politicians making life for just people tough, just because they allow the weeds in our society to flourish. Our Creator is the 'supergardener' far above any ordinary gardener and in the end the good plants will win. Weeds and corrupted gardeners tend to be so greedy that they suffocate themselves. Congrats man, if at the age of 16 you can write such a high qualtiy poem, I think a great future lies in front of you. If Egypt would be part of the Ottoman empire still, I would hope my country is part of it too. :) (Report) Reply

  • (6/21/2010 1:24:00 PM)


    very well written and a very deep message (Report) Reply

  • (6/17/2010 10:38:00 AM)


    The poem is wonderful and convey a deep meaning. Are we that foolish Gardner? The garner who treat good and beautiful badly against the bad things and help them to grow watching that the godd things are dying as he is so enticed by the bad things.He isspoling the very garden given to him to take care? Thanks. I give 10+ (Report) Reply

  • Siddartha Montik (6/7/2010 11:41:00 AM)


    Nice one Omar.. explains so much how the world is going on now!
    nice narrative.. right in the garden! thanks for sharing!
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  • (4/17/2010 11:38:00 AM)


    Weeds are spice of a garden…
    Otherwise the gardener’s work will come to halt…
    So to give employment weeds bribed gardener lolol
    Voted 10+
    Ms. Nivedita
    UK
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  • Ahmad Shiddiqi (3/28/2010 10:56:00 PM)


    Wonderful! ! ! A very nice metaphor on flower, an autobiography-pastoral words. (Report) Reply

  • (2/17/2010 4:09:00 PM)


    very interesting, , very well writing
    like it soo much, , really a very talented poet
    thank's for charing
    angelica
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  • Ravi Sathasivam (2/15/2010 2:22:00 AM)


    Very interesting poem.
    Very true and well penned
    You are a talented poet
    Enjoyed reading it
    Thanks for sharing with me
    10+
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  • (2/14/2010 9:52:00 AM)


    a great great great poem & also the rhyming is very nice & the way of writing itself is unique & really predicting a very talented poet.10+++ (Report) Reply

  • (2/13/2010 4:25:00 PM)


    A delightful truth stated in a poem, thanks for inviting me to your site. (Report) Reply

  • (2/13/2010 4:25:00 PM)


    A delightful truth stated in a poem, thanks for inviting me to your site. (Report) Reply

  • (2/13/2010 8:09:00 AM)


    Omar, that so interesting i like that poem you chose the right words and the right reaction
    i say well done and perfect work i give you 10 for that work
    waiting for more and more of your work God bliss you
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  • Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal (2/12/2010 11:39:00 PM)


    the plants are trying to survive
    while the weeds are bound to exhaust themselves
    the gardener knows it, but he's trying to forget
    the weeds bribed the foolish gardener......plants are going to survive and weeds going to exhaust.. vry rightly said.. much damage done already but still live hopes are there....i liked the poem....10

    read mine lovelynlife....10.. diamonds are for ever
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  • Prince Obed de la Cruz (2/12/2010 8:05:00 PM)


    sometimes people forget who they are.... they sometimes tend to look with fear at those who are lower than themselves... nice piece! (Report) Reply

  • (2/12/2010 3:54:00 PM)


    Ah.. more than the garden. more than the gardener.. wonderful. (Report) Reply

  • (2/12/2010 2:34:00 PM)


    That's so emotional and deep! ! I can see where you are going here!
    I loved the way you repeated: 'the weeds bribed the foolish gardener' That was nice! But you know...I loved when you used simpler vocabulairy and rhymed everything! That used to be nice aswell- - the way you played with words so simply and nicely! It felt like there was life in your poems!
    But this style is nice too...Maybe because I don't use this style of poetry I wasn't so impressed like I was with your other poems! ! But this is also beautiful! Good job!
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  • (2/11/2010 3:06:00 PM)


    Omar, great poem. You drew me directly into the garden to experience the misbehavior of the garderner and the negligence and terrible treatment of the flowers. Good write, keep up the good work. Lynn (Report) Reply

  • (2/11/2010 1:52:00 PM)


    An Excellent poem Omar, I like your description to the pain and the agony of the plants.Also you chose the words very well. Good poem...keep working and developing :)
    A Big TEN to your amazing work.
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Poem Submitted: Thursday, February 11, 2010

Poem Edited: Thursday, August 19, 2010


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