Morning Snowflakes Poem by Jette Blackstone

Morning Snowflakes

Rating: 5.0


Morning snowflakes clot the air,
rest in the nook of an old fedora.
The shop doors are still locked.
A red sweater.Blue eyes glance

and a wool coat closes.
The sun hides behind a grey veneer
and a man hesitates
before crossing.

The last leaf on an elm tree
holds on beneath the ice.
A rhythmic clap of soles
ceases before the closed sign.

He pulls the brim down
to stop the wind.
Leathered fingers
press on papers inside a pocket.

Closed, coffeeless morning.

Tuesday, December 5, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: life,moment,snow,winter
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
For Daniel
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Rebecca Navarre 25 March 2018

Very Moving And Powerfully Sown! ! ! ! ! Thank You Ever So Much For Sharing This! ! ! ! ! Ever So Very Many 10S! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! +++++

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Jette Blackstone 10 July 2018

Thanks Flower Navarre. :)

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Luo Zhihai 14 January 2018

Morning snowflakes are white and beautiful. I like them.

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Jette Blackstone 10 July 2018

Thanks Luo Zhihai

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Mihaela Pirjol 19 December 2017

Descriptive, palpable, real- alive! An ordinary day- made extraordinary!

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Jette Blackstone 19 December 2017

Thanks Mihaela. I'm glad you like the poem. Thanks for reading.

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Glen Kappy 19 December 2017

I like this, Jette! Like clot the air, rest in the nook of an old fedora, grey veneer—in general the nicely observed attention to detail. I like as well how you shaped the poem. And the last and closing line is perfect. It was easy to imagine myself into this one. Excellent! If you’re interested, my poem Forecast seems similar to me in its intention. Glen

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Jette Blackstone 19 December 2017

Thanks so much Glen. I'll check out your poem soon.... I appreciate you reading.

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Mj Lemon 18 December 2017

Just discovered your work. It is amazing. This poem takes me back to an age of innocence (not the Age of Innocence) . The imagery could be from an old Hollywood movie, or a scene from a street corner today. That missing cup of coffee may just be a metaphor for every thing missing in this person's life. A terrific poem

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Jette Blackstone 19 December 2017

Thanks so much for finding my work MJ. In this poem, I was actually trying to capture an image similar to the way that George Trakl does....a space just before movement that is in silence. I am no Trakl, but it was a fun exercise.

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