~ Ms. Niv Waiting ~ Poem by MS. NIVEDITA BAGCHI SPC. UK.

~ Ms. Niv Waiting ~

Rating: 4.5


MS. NIV WAITING
Ms. Nivedita
10.11.09.
UK

Crimson sun shirt
Azure sky baggy beau
Watch assassinating time
Rose of light dimming out.

Liquid diamond love
Dropping out,
Bunking out,
Melting out betwixt
Tapered balletic fingers
Silhouette fading
At distant stoic sky
Kissing hazy-fuzzy horizon.

Entirety limning off
Come on O’ Beau
Picasso’s angled
Effervescence dame
In outré outfit
Ms. Niv waiting
But still.

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COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Samanyan Lakshminarayanan 02 January 2010

YOU PLAY THE LEAD ROLE IN THIS UNIQUE POEM OF YOURS...BUT WHY REMAIN STILL AT THE END

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Kranthi Pothineni 19 December 2009

Wonderful. The use of poet names made it really beautiful. Very well crafted.

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John Knight 01 December 2009

Hi Niv - this is Beautiful - Well structured - lovely form and flow - excellent content - a TEN on all counts. V 1 Sets the scene the lovely Ms Niv is waiting - time is passing. V 2 What does she have to offer her Beau? Liquid Diamond Love - melting as the Sun is setting 'Kissing the hazy-fuzzy horizon' in a way that Ms Viv longs to be kissed. V 3 The tension hightens - Will her Beau appear? Ms Niv is more ready for him than she has ever been! 'Picasso's angled effervescence dame in outre outfit' Were is O'Beau are all Irishmen this reticent? Ms Niv is waiting still - AMAZING! None of us red blooded PH Males would keep you waiting Ms Niv - we all love you. Love you in Poetry - JOHN X

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Amitabha Bagchi 29 November 2009

‘…At distant stoic sky // Kissing hazy-fuzzy horizon….’ Resplendent subjectivisation…subsubtle yet pulsatile… Ten++ AB London

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Dr. V. Chakravorty 28 November 2009

Like all Dame [Ms. Nivedita LOL! ], your waiting worth in such ambience and outfit… Excellently described …romantic…luring… Dr. V.

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Miroslava Odalovic 15 October 2010

Hopefully embraces by a mellifluent universe waiting still as well :)

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Sally Plumb Plumb 29 July 2010

This piece cojures pictures of a beach boy.

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Almedia Knight-Oliver 05 July 2010

The images and diction are quite alluring and can be- in my opinion-analyzed on a couple levels: the power of the beauty of the female and the beauty of nature 'waiting' for sun set to sun and rise and all life form in their majestic beauty! Ms Niv, captured both level of her poem with, striking images, and description that blows one mind. Thanks for such a beautiful poem! A! 0+++-i hope the my register.

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Saadat Tahir 08 June 2010

Carmine folded in shades of baby pinks... and subtleties... shroud the turmoil...deep within... for nature will always have its way...we will pick up the debris too well written...balanced and structured cheers and ten

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Gautam Sen 25 February 2010

hi Niv, A poem of good metaphor, the mood of yours has been straight way projected in the nature and its art. 'Liquid Diamond Love' - a good phrase well set here. So many other beautiful lines are there to give your poem a great height. Keep it up. Ten + Keep it up. Gautam

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