My Country Poem by Kylee Bartz

Comment, even if you think it sucks. I want to know how I can make my poetry better. Thanks guys!

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..sometimes I wonder if kids would rule, woud've we had a better world? ..Go on write more..I understand your point, but dont be too sad there is no country on this world not to have both the good and bad..

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i like my country more than any one and i hope that people will one day also respect the country 10

I wrote this for my BFF, Matt cause he inspired me.

I wish i could read this aloud on CNN or MSNBC...or any major news station. What a poignant and accurate message you have sent thru the airwaves, describing the state and condition of our country and your reaction, which is shared by so many others. You speak with heart and conviction, Kylee. Keep writing, voicing........sjg

this is better than the other ones i read of yours, for in this one you've opened youself up to realities here in AMERICA, and the others seem to ramble without any depth of what you can actually write.the will and determination is there but the words have not surfaced. this is my own opinion thou, and it is not criticism but consructive criticism for you to improve. to me poetry is an emotion which has not yet been released, but is at the door waiting to escape. (i hope i have not offended you with what i say) as for this country, in 200 years we have accomplished more than any coutry in the world. feel proud and grateful that we can still voice our opinions.

Great political poem! I like that it shows the grief and hardships that most Americans go through.

It is easy to point out mistakes. You are no different from your country. What have you done to correct them. When your house is in disarray, who will come and set it right? Next door person? It is like that. Don't you know Mother Teresa, who has won Billions of Heart. Can't you be one like her? The words hate, dislike should be used to the least. Think Good. Act Good. Goodness will definitely prevail. Good Luck!