! My Muse Poem by Vidyadhar Durgekar
! My Muse
It is your company in solitude I treasure,
Those are the imaginative moments of pleasure;
I long to be within your majestic universe ever,
To seek the creative bliss beyond measure;
Everyday I find time in the midst of my schedule,
Waiting for you whole day, one or the other will ridicule;
You appear slowly with an exclusive veil of silence,
Disappearing with the pin dropp impatience;
I feel you during the meditational presence,
For many it may not make any fruitful sense;
You are my friend in inspirational moments,
You are there during my moments of creative impulse;
During solitary moments I evince divine gratitude;
You are my ingenious teacher and a guide,
With you I see the nature as a beautiful bride,
Time spent with you were like a high flying ride;
You travel with me to the distant abyss,
To find in the deep dark hollow crevice,
In the deep hollow abyss my heart beats do miss,
Only to wake up with an enlightened bliss;
Oh! My friend loneliness;
I am too unsophisticated to know about monorhythmic stanzas... but this is a stunning poem which could be read in so many ways.... all through the emotions play beteen the line... seducing the reader to take it to the end... Loneliness follows all of us...your poem is a true story for most of us.
its a beautifull poem.... throught the poem i felt you were missing someone and so this lonliness has been bestowed upon you.. but as i came near the end i realised..... u r one with lonliness... thats become such a part of ur life... it is a constant part of all our lives too..... thanks for sharing.......
sometimes negativity and the reality of sadness in the world bears a very beautiful creation... inspiration really comes out of anything that our hearts feel... thank you for the beautiful poem...
An insightful depiction of the creative glory of solitude. Very powerfully and movingly penned. Thanks for sharing, Vidyadhar.
A very nice work. If you can chisel the lines further, it would be even nicer. About the last line regarding the loneliness. Solitude and loneliness are different. There is creativity in solitude whereas it is absent in loneliness. Loneliness carries an element of disappointment and frustration deep within whereas it is absent in solitude. You may reframe the last line accordingly. Thanks.
I agree with Paul, if you touch up the rhyming this can be a great poem...making solitude an unusal friend...
Since you ask me to comment, and I cannot send you a private message - On a technical level, the irregular rhyming (AAAA BBCC CCCx xDDD EEEEE) is a little unsettling. Verses 1 and 5 have only one rhyme each, and 2 lines don't rhyme with anything. If you could make all verses have one rhyme it would be better. I assume 'sense' in v.3 is meant to rhyme with 'silence / presence / impatience / moments', but it is really only a half-rhyme. 'Evince' is a rather unusual word, and I'm not sure you have used it correctly - could you use a different word? As for the meaning, it is a very unusual idea you have, to look on loneliness as a friend - the first line is very striking, and the last line, especially as it is shorter, sums up your idea. So as a poem, this is pretty good, just let down a little by the technique.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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4/25/2024 10:55:56 PM # 1.0.0.1119
A fine devotional poem that uses the word 'loneliness' as a metaphor for 'stillness' or 'absence of thought'. You express your 'flashes of enlightenment' as my dear teacher Dorotea Mangiamele used to call them, with clarity and poetic grace and recognize that the bliss can only reveal itself when the search for it is let go of. Beautiful poem. love, Allie ♥ ♥ ♥ ♥