Platonic Game Poem by Asif Andalib

This poem is rather 'Helter Skelter'. It begins in one way, continues in another way and ends in a different way. This leaves the reader to wonder about your focus. This poem is out of focus. It may be two or three poems put together. Otherwise, I think you are on to something. I would simply try to work it a bit. Good luck! I actually like the expressions in it. GW62

It is a great poem. Sad because I could sense the desperation in your words for the plea of something real. Keep up the good work. Please comment on my new one, Imagination that became destiny

wornout love like the dress she wears and ur kisses losing their way.......wow! nice imagery and a beautiful write altogether!

love the third stanza....it's awesome...nice work

great poem asif...there is sadness but still very passionate, sweet and romantic....expressed great emotions on platonic game, platonic love.but you have also expressed it as.divine love.even though there's desire.....loving without seeing...10 for this....you're a versatile writer asif...more power...

So you've been having a platonic love for a pretty long time, huh?

another beautiful and deep write Asif with so much pain in it....i liked it thanks

wow, ......wow hahahaha this is amazing good work

hey asif, platomic game, what can i say, i have to agree with greenwolf about the focus of the poem but i beleive that is essential to the spirit of the poem, thank you for the read..... good work keep it going

Commendable work...Structurally mellifluous...Intruiging storyline.Solid Penning. F j R