ONElia AVElar

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Prisoner Of One`s Own Words - Poem by ONElia AVElar

You are not prisoner
of what you say today.
Do not lock yourself
in cell of words, do not
build a citadel.
We need no promises,
we need no pledge.
We stay together -
you and me, as long
as we feel free...

PS.: I am not prisoner of
my words, so, please
be kind - forget it all,
do not take the key.
Thank you.


Comments about Prisoner Of One`s Own Words by ONElia AVElar

  • (9/23/2009 12:12:00 PM)


    You seem to raise a dilemma in the 'PS' which I recognise - we are voluntary 'prisoners' when we love, no matter how we protest that declarations, words, can't be binding on lovers. 'Be kind - do not take the key' is an original thought about the lover's situation - bound voluntarily, at the mercy of the loved one. I hope I read this aright? As usual, your poem is condensed and mysterious, so that my comments, in contrast, are wordy and inept. Sorry I've taken so long to discover this interesting piece, One. x Jan (Report) Reply

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  • (10/20/2008 3:09:00 PM)


    Two themes bound together in a delicate fabric - the key to security is in the way we use words which bind us to our beliefs... (Report) Reply

  • Ashraful Musaddeq (8/26/2008 11:08:00 PM)


    It's really amazing freedom, very modern approach.10 for it. (Report) Reply

  • (7/2/2008 12:32:00 AM)


    Words can come back to haunt, but only if we look at the words and not the person....beautiful sentiments here...Coach (Report) Reply

  • (6/4/2008 7:10:00 AM)


    I love the message in this poem Onelia, makes me think. And yes, we sometimes do make people prisoner's of their own words. Unfortunately our words may stay but feelings can change. HG: -) xxx (Report) Reply

  • (5/24/2008 3:53:00 PM)


    'We stay together -
    you and me, as long
    as we feel free...' The sentiment is right there - freedom to love should not be bound by words - feelings should dictate...another gem here One. Clever stuff. j x
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  • Paolo Giuseppe Mazzarello (5/21/2008 4:26:00 PM)


    In a web cautiously moving steps as well as words (Report) Reply

  • Dr.subhendu Kar (4/22/2008 12:47:00 PM)


    love still flows by the words
    as when pledged to its whisper
    even locked by the speckles when bristles
    yet by its reeks of illusion in its room
    still not deluded as we do feel as prisoner
    as the passion seemingly listless by diffusion..................one of the most powerful poem by the imagery yet of unique genere, love when seems to be the game of love by words that happens to happen then and there.......splendid work by the ingenuity,10/10, thanks for sharing
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  • (4/17/2008 4:34:00 PM)


    A work of art... I believe that we choose to love, indeed. t x (Report) Reply

  • PERSIAN NIGHTINGALE (4/6/2008 4:00:00 AM)


    'We stay together -
    you and me, as long
    as we feel free...' though love is lock
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  • Paolo Giuseppe Mazzarello (4/3/2008 4:22:00 PM)


    I've immediately remembered 'Lucia di Lammermoor', an opera. Also there one can find or talk about promises, pledges. Here in this poem adult life, adult love is incumbent. Really, also in that opera. (Report) Reply

  • (4/3/2008 12:23:00 PM)


    Aren't there always ties?

    'I know that we had both resolved
    that love was just a harmless game,
    but fear that I became involved
    the moment that I asked your name.'

    A thoughtful poem, as always, One.

    F
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Poem Submitted: Thursday, April 3, 2008

Poem Edited: Sunday, May 11, 2008


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