ONElia AVElar

Rookie - 46 Points (Bulgaria)

Domestic - Poem by ONElia AVElar

I am at home
but still homesick
my homeless heart
is sick - true home for
heart is much to seek.

Comments about Domestic by ONElia AVElar

  • (5/1/2009 4:28:00 PM)

    Darling, you always manage to say SO MUCH with so few words. It is a trick I have never yet mastered. Love this one. There must be a home waiting to house your heart! HG: -) xx (Report) Reply

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  • C. P. Sharma (10/17/2008 7:32:00 AM)

    There is a Home away from home,
    It is covered with a pleasure dome.
    We came from there, there we go,
    We are homesick for lurking glow.
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  • Indira Renganathan (8/19/2008 3:22:00 AM)

    Very true, very true.Homeless heart is just a house of emptied love.10+++++Thanks for sharing (Report) Reply

  • (7/19/2008 3:34:00 AM)

    nice one, so much said with jsut a few words (Report) Reply

  • Paolo Giuseppe Mazzarello (6/13/2008 12:59:00 AM)

    In this poem somebody feels like one hasn't been back at home again. (Report) Reply

  • (5/16/2008 8:12:00 AM)

    Finding love is the key to this sick heart - much to contemplate in this short musing Onelia - another intense piece from your gifted pen. justine. (Report) Reply

  • (5/9/2008 6:47:00 AM)

    Very cute penning, a lot said in so few words (as David already commented) . I love what you say Onelia, it's very clever and your heart is still waiting for it's home - understand.... The title makes me think you had a 'domestic' as we would use here for a bit of a fight between loved ones. A lovely little poem. HG: -) xx (Report) Reply

  • (4/29/2008 3:09:00 PM) short, but so true. I love how you connect w/ your inner thoughts in every poem so well...your at home contemplating true love which you lack, it seems. (Report) Reply

  • (4/19/2008 4:53:00 PM)

    A veritable wee gem here, succinct and tragically true as it so often is. t x (Report) Reply

  • (4/17/2008 12:34:00 PM)

    Written simply but to great effect. Brilliant, Onelia. (Report) Reply

  • (4/14/2008 6:13:00 PM)

    homesick - heartsick; a home in the heart. The poignancy is undeniable. Rgds, Ivan (Report) Reply

  • Dr.subhendu Kar (4/11/2008 3:48:00 PM)

    home when wishful by the heart
    as the heart when heartful by the home............superb write yet luscious and soft, i do enjoy,10/10, thanks for sharing
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  • (4/8/2008 9:54:00 AM)

    Leleee strahotno, da da da mnogo e yako! Vurha e tova! Haresva mi.

    Haha. LOL

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  • (4/7/2008 3:37:00 PM)

    Excellent haiku, loved every word, (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Saturday, April 5, 2008

Poem Edited: Sunday, May 4, 2008

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