Souren Mondal

Gold Star - 31,476 Points (10th November 1991 / Chandannagar)

Red Ashes Of Terror - Poem by Souren Mondal

Young Nafisa,
all of seven,
sat against a blown up tank
and wished her younger brother Rahim
had been as lucky as her.


She, after all, had her right leg intact and
a stick for crutches.

Martha was graduating from High School.
She wished her Peter was there.
He died in Iraq.


HOMELESS PAUL sat with a pitchboard sign

He was an Afghan veteran without an eye and with PTSD.
A guy named Ahmed gave him a dollar

What a piece of work is war?
A bunch of lunatics kill innocents
and another bunch of lunatics kill more innocents
to avenge the death of innocents.

And all we are left with in the end
are the rotten red ashes of humanity drowned in the wind...

Souren Mondal
November 22,2015

Topic(s) of this poem: war

Form: Free Verse

Comments about Red Ashes Of Terror by Souren Mondal

  • Edward Kofi Louis (3/5/2016 2:44:00 PM)

    War destroys and kills! Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

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  • Susan Williams (3/5/2016 2:41:00 PM)

    I like the use of vignettes to carry your message. The politicians who enable war never see the individual faces they create with the savagery of war but the common man does. I don 't know what would happen if we all spoke out vigorously against war, would our political leaders hear us? And would it matter if one side or another refuses to stop killing as a way to get their way? But it is good for the soul to hear poets like you to speak powerfully out against it (Report) Reply

  • Nosheen Irfan (3/4/2016 12:20:00 AM)

    Rotten red ashes of humanity drowned in the wind...marvelous. A very significant piece of work from a brave, out-spoken poet. Violence n inhumanity are the worst things to plague this world. A poignant write on the most important issue of the modern world. How terrorism can affect lives of innocent people is brought out with great depth n insight. (Report) Reply

  • Akhtar Jawad (2/6/2016 7:51:00 AM)

    Terror is the worst problem of time, Souren Mondal, giving various names has honestly described it. Terror has no religion, no nationality and it believes in no ethics. (Report) Reply

    Souren Mondal (2/18/2016 12:33:00 AM)

    Thank you Akhtar sahab..

  • Galina Italyanskaya (1/22/2016 12:41:00 PM)

    Yes, but somebody believes that he gets his profit from war. It's nothing but business for him.
    Silly thing, but there are those who sell and buy consequences of wars. It's a very doubtful profit, but they believe in it more than in God. Or it's their god.
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    Souren Mondal (2/18/2016 12:32:00 AM)

    Thanks for commenting...

  • Savita Tyagi (1/22/2016 8:40:00 AM)

    The ugly face of war and terror all around by those innocent children's faces that take shape in mind. The poem stirs, it disturbs but all the more it is a reason to have resolve to face this death and destruction with out loosing hope. Learn the resilience for life from those depicted in poem facing hardship.Excellent piece! I am trying to read all the poet of the book. So glad to come across yours. Wishing you the best. (Report) Reply

    Souren Mondal (2/18/2016 12:31:00 AM)

    Thank you a lot.. It means a lot to me :)

  • Pamela Sinicrope (1/21/2016 3:03:00 PM)

    Mondal’s poem paints a dark portrait of the many victims of terrorism and war from around the world that have suffered from the inability of humans to solve problems without violence. His style of writing ‘throws’ the reader in the midst of these victims’ daily lives to bring a ‘face’ to those who have lost limbs, family members, their minds, and their homes due to terrorism and violence. His lines, ‘/ What a piece of work is war? / A bunch of lunatics kill innocents / and another bunch of lunatics kill more innocents / to avenge the death of innocents /’, again sums up the absurdity of war and terrorism. His symbolism and the final words ‘rotten red ashes of humanity’ highlight the destruction and death that the world is left with in the aftermath of terrorism. His poem makes us take pause, feel unsettles, and think about the violence, death, suffering, and loss that results from terrorism and war. (Report) Reply

    Souren Mondal (1/21/2016 8:42:00 PM)

    Thank you for the wonderful critique Pam, and editing the poem for me... You are life-saver :)

  • Daniel Brick (11/30/2015 11:20:00 AM)

    This is so truthful and powerful. But it's double-edged. I look at as an artist and think, THIS IS WHAT WE WANT TO AVOID. THE CARNAGE, THE DESTRUCTION, THE SENSELESS SPIRAL OF REVENGE. But a committed fighter
    It's a stunning poem that will haunt me until I can dispel the impact by playing Mozart's Clarinet Concerto. I will carry the poem within and learn what it has to teach me and then let go of it.
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    Souren Mondal (12/1/2015 7:36:00 AM)

    Thank you Daniel. You are right on how to see the poem. An artist will never want violence in real life.Shakespeare may end his Macbeth with the head of Macbeth being exhibited by Macduff, but when we remember what Malcom said in the fourth act, we can feel that he is hinting that this violence will result into nothing.. But we also know that people like Malcom will hunt for blood, like Macbeth did killing the children of Macduff.. It will happen.. We can't stop terrorists or the government from fighting with each other through poetry. But as 'unacknowledged legislators of the world' we must raise our voices against this insanity!

  • Valsa George (11/30/2015 12:47:00 AM)

    Bloodshed and horror.... mass killing, starving and wounded survivors.......! ! Images of debilitating life is all what we see after a war! Innocents are being killed time after time! That primitive urge to hunt the weak is still in man! He never learns anything from history! Hamlet's bleak view of life..... we too are likely to share, seeing the atrocities around! In the line.... 'What a piece of work is war' is resonated Hamlet's famous soliloquy.... 'what a piece of work is man...... yet to me what is this quintessence of dust'! GREAT write! A 10 (Report) Reply

  • Sumit Ganguly (11/29/2015 9:43:00 AM)

    Hope, suffering, death all are mixed up in war-the eternal confrontation for power. Common people eternally hate the activity. Good representation.10 (Report) Reply

    Souren Mondal (11/29/2015 11:44:00 AM)

    Thank you for reading Sumit. I agree with your view as I have said in the poem and in the discussions below...

  • Bharati Nayak (11/27/2015 7:34:00 AM)

    What a piece of work is war
    A bunch of lunatics kills innocents
    And another bunch of lunatics kill more innocents
    To avenge the death of innocents- - - - War causes only in the loss of innocent lives.It is an act of insanity that should stop.As we progress more in science, our war becomes more terrible and more destructive.The very survival of this beautiful earth is at stake.So all the sane people of this civilized should work towards building peace and avoid war at any cost.
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    Souren Mondal (11/27/2015 10:41:00 PM)

    Exactly Bharti.. Humans have lived peacefully at times.. No one wants war or terror, or war on terrorism either.. We can all live peacefully if we only decide to live like human beings, upholding the virtues of kindness and humanity. Instead, we indulge into war, murders, killing innocents for no real reasons.. Pathetic...

  • Bakuli Bhakali (11/26/2015 1:20:00 AM)

    Really! It’s terrible!
    Each year we lose lots of people in war, some fighting some saving!
    We lose lots of money defending war, that we could have use for some better purpose
    Yet we used it all for a waste!

    You penned the pain of war wonderfully! !
    Thanks for sharing
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    Bakuli Bhakali (11/26/2015 3:59:00 AM)

    ya, that's true...
    so, keep writing and keep voicing
    maybe... some day we would be able to stop this...
    so never let the hope die..

    Souren Mondal (11/26/2015 3:11:00 AM)

    Exactly Bakuli... As Kelly has said below. It's bloody insanity! We can go ahead and pray for Paris, but as Dalai Lama said - we made this thing, we should fix it - and we are not.. Instead of focusing on why people are after each other's blood, we are shedding more blood... That's simply pathetic...

  • Mohammed Asim Nehal (11/26/2015 12:45:00 AM)

    Heartfelt.........A true sketch and outcome of mindless war............Situation going from Bad to worst and human showing their thirst for one another's blood.....Who cares what is left behind, who care what they suffer, They are doing it for the cause only they better know...Thought provoking poem Souren, Thanks for sharing. (Report) Reply

    Souren Mondal (11/26/2015 3:07:00 AM)

    Exactly Asim.. I saw a documentary on Afganistan, where they showed so many tiny little children left without limbs... L-I-M-B-S! ! For whatever the hell we are fighting for (In the name of Radicalism? Crude oil in the Middle East? What exactly? ?) no one, on both sides, has the effin rights to destroy childhood... NO - A BIG N-O! Instead we do exactly that... I am not a religious guy Asim, an atheist, but whatever I understand of religion, none of it says that we should propagate terror... I am neither a big fan of some kind of 'anarchy' or anything, but no government should kill either... There are vested interests on both sides and they cover that up with bull sh**! Disgusted and hurt, that is how I feel.. Lost childhoods, lost lives, lost families, economies - why? ? For nothing...

  • Kelly Kurt (11/25/2015 11:49:00 AM)

    {Blown up}
    This is the reality of the world we inhabit. Stupidity followed by stupidity. Revenge in place of solution and the insane hope that an invisible magic entity will solve it all.
    Thanks, Souren.
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    Souren Mondal (11/25/2015 10:18:00 PM)

    Exactly Kelly.. We created these problems and we must find the answers... No one else will do it for us..

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, November 25, 2015

Poem Edited: Thursday, January 21, 2016

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