Ritual Of Alienation Poem by Soran M. H

Ritual Of Alienation

Rating: ★5.0


I hear the rustle of slippers
behind me
who is it
Following me, a little apart?
I turn and stare
I see nothing
just dry leaves
seeking their destiny
after waving goodbye
to the trees


The trees are silent
stiff in meditation
the sidewalks are frozen
the streets are empty
I wonder:
where will these narrow paths
take us?


All the rhythm of the seasons
is stopped


But the yellow rose
that smiled at the hum of bees
and cared nothing about death -
let us hope
life
still pulses in her veins

Friday, December 20, 2019
Topic(s) of this poem: bees,meditation,seasons
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Shaun Cronick 24 December 2019

A superb and sublimely brilliant piece of work. Beautifully written with many hidden depths and avenues, to make any reader stop and think and be self aware. And ending on my favourite virtue, hope Glorious, eternal hope. Thank you for writing and sharing this captivating and equally enchanting poem Soran. Rated 10++ and added your good self and this wondrous poem to my favourite poet and poem list. And may you and the loved ones around you live a long life filled with virtue. Take care man.

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Soran M. H 24 December 2019

It is very kind from you writing all these beautiful words about my poem, your view is very important to me, from my understanding you are loving poetry so much and it is living with you most of the time, so that you are trying to reach the depths of its ocean, even you are not giving up with the first reading of any poem if you don’t get to the point of satisfaction, really it is great, always we are waiting for more from you, Shaun the great poet... all the best...thanks again

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 21 December 2019

The cycle of life leads us to that ritual of alienation. It is inevitable. A beautiful poem with superb imagery.

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Soran M. H 22 December 2019

Many thanks for your reading and feeling towards my poem, Regards

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Soran M. H 27 December 2019

Dear Rose Thanks for taking your time to comment on my poem. Stay blessed always.

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Soran M. H 16 October 2026

P1/ Well said, Rose. In poetry, quality is more important than quantity. A poet should always ask themselves:

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Soran M. H 16 October 2026

P2/ 'Does my text add something new?' If it is merely a repetition of ideas or an expression of mundane, everyday concerns, then there is no need to label it as poetry. Taking one's time and replenishing the well of inspiration are essential for producing truly distinctive poetry.

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 16 October 2026

Superb, superb closure lines. They breathe life.

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Rose Marie Juan-austin 16 October 2026

Soran's Poetry has always that lingering charisma and enigma that will make a reader revisit his wonderful work of art. A magnificent poem . Loved this line: ....just dry leaves seeking their destiny after waving goodbye to the trees.'

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Chinedu Dike 04 December 2020

Very powerfully and movingly crafted with artistic brilliance.

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