Shores Of My Heart❤️ Poem by M. Asim Nehal

Shores Of My Heart❤️

Rating: 5.0


Between the shores of my heart
Under the flowing lustrous holy river
Where the white dove of wishes
Floats on the chariot of stars
Teasing drunken mischievous moon.

I make a bridge of love to drink
From the intoxicated lips of fate
Which will fill drop by drop, my cup's thirst
Where the virgin red roses
From the exotic garden of bosom
Waits to get crushed under passionate action.

The cerise shyness on her cheek
Will melt by the firewood of my passion
Making the sheet underneath sweaty with pearls
And two uncut diamonds in dark night
Will luminescence my heart's mind
Millions of joy will remove the fatigue
And the scent will be carried by the wind.

Wednesday, November 23, 2022
Topic(s) of this poem: life
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Rajan Trajan Renganathan 24 November 2022

Pure poetry nicely conceived and written, after long gap welcome back.

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S H 24 November 2022

I make a bridge of love to drink From the intoxicated lips of fate........Philosophy of life in a different way.

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Nabakishore Dash 24 November 2022

Great metaphors are used by u dear Dr.Nehal.

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Juhaina Tumlu 24 November 2022

Very hopeful poem 'Millions of joy will remove the fatigue And the scent will be carried by the wind.' great lines

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Sylvia Frances Chan 26 November 2022

You have had a thousand days sleep, now awakan again with this marvelous wonderful romantic narrative about LIFE,5 Stars TOP Score and myriad more, dear Dr. M. Asim Nehal Sir

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Bri Edwards 27 November 2022

The ending lines of stanza 2 are getting spicy; that IS OK with me. : ) Line 13: why use 'firewood' and not just 'fire'? Make 'luminescence' into a verb. 'Millions of joy' is not correct. And I don't like a capital letter beginning each line, or so little punctuation. bri

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Bri Edwards 27 November 2022

I DO like the alliteration 'mischievous moon'. Line 8: I'd add a comma BEFORE 'drop by drop' OR I'd remove comma from AFTER 'drop by drop'.

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Bri Edwards 27 November 2022

Well, Asim, you've requested I read the poem and I have. I shall leave a comment or two now and may come again if you reequest it again. I don't care usually for love poems, nor do I care usually for symbolism.

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LeeAnn Azzopardi 26 November 2022

What a wonderful poem! Bravo!

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Sylvia Frances Chan 26 November 2022

Congratulations for your appearance on the 100 List of Best Poems of Member Poets of PH. To my Favourites

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