From the farthest of Hebrides
A letter came all way through the sea
I opened its flap, read the name
Oh its for me!
She wrote it with her seraph hands
The words revived my soul
Oh she embedded her heart for me
Hidden in the lovely verses of the scroll………………….
Sent a call for me
from lands she nested
of the lovely maiden
whose beauty she manifested.................
And I followed the scent she left behind
To discover the beauty that charmed my mind..............
Copyright © Yash Shinde 2012
Great vocab. And you could create a good feel.. Way to go.. God bless! :)
Another very good write, I'll be reading all your work in due course.
Lovely! great piece of work from you. Thanks for sharing it with us. E.K.L.
A heartwarming, romantic and charming letter from one so dear. A lovely piece indeed. Thanks for sharing. Please read my poem MANDELA - THE IMMORTAL ICON.
Lovely poem. Its very touch. Great job. Your very good. (:
The remarkable feature of the poem is your focus on it, as sonnet form is rightly chosen for the theme, supported by appropriate images...like Hebrides image is much suitable more than any modern scale of distances, a letter image coming through the sea, the exclamation of excitement and joy...it's Shakespearean in composition with 3 stanzas with alternate rhyme, ending in a closed couplet...my suggestion is to edit and remove the dots which apparently have no reason...in punctuation if you still want to use them then use only 3 dots...just a humble suggestion for such beautiful poetry!
Wow! A truly deep write why not it is for the beloved. Love your ink.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Oh my! This is so good! Your poem is so fluently flowing, you can feel the wind on the sea rushing as the letter comes, through reading this poem! Oh it is so good!