Another door
Opening
To window
Of future
At first
Darkness
Blinding
Sight shocked
Fear
Rising
Threatening
Paralyzing
Demons fighting
For victory
In mortal hell
Abyss waiting
Nice one.... beautiful lilines....10 You shall remain alert And fail their attempt To subvert your mission With their wicked designs
Interesting start...as you have said your poem does give a sense of near-death experience...top score
Indira, thx for visiting and responding. If you wish to get a further sense of that experience, please read Soul's Journey Parts I-V.
Fear Rising Threatening Paralyzing Demons fighting For victory......you are becoming very much mystical. tony
Lots of things have been implied through a single stanza..Enjoyed it..
Thank you so much, Bernard. If you can find the time, please read Parts II - V. I'd love to read your feedback.
Richard, this is really interesting - a near death experience - a door opening to an unknown territory. Waiting for the series with much eagerness and a thrilling suspense..
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
You abandon ordinary sentence structure because its formal pattern would give a false sense of security, and verb tense is anchored in our expectations of an undisturbed continuity. Instead we experience accelerated time, speeds that are traumatic, the ground of being collapses, and we witness the true reality of unrelieved conflict between cosmic forces. This revelation climaxes with the looming a-b-y-s-s, a terrifying entry in a non-human world. Or perhaps, even more terrifying, the abyss is the next stage of our human existence.
Perfect analysis, Daniel. And I'm so happy that I was able to pull it off. Considering the stakes! But this is just the preliminary stage. The next stage is going to be a lot tougher. But I'm really looking forward to it! I sincerely believe that the abyss is NOT the next stage of our human existence. But there are forces at work that are striving to successfully accomplish that goal. I think that it's part of my job as a poet to keep shedding light on this matter.