Soul's Journey -Part I Poem by Richard Wlodarski

Soul's Journey -Part I

Rating: 4.9


Another door
Opening
To window
Of future
At first
Darkness
Blinding
Sight shocked
Fear
Rising
Threatening
Paralyzing
Demons fighting
For victory
In mortal hell
Abyss waiting

Wednesday, March 15, 2017
Topic(s) of this poem: death,development,god,healing,life,life and death,lifespan,memories,memory
POET'S NOTES ABOUT THE POEM
Unlike a work in progress, this is a continual poem. The events are factual. The poem is about my near-death experience. The poem will continue to unfold in stages. This process of heightening suspense is meant to give the reader a minute sense of the near-death experience.
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Daniel Brick 06 August 2017

You abandon ordinary sentence structure because its formal pattern would give a false sense of security, and verb tense is anchored in our expectations of an undisturbed continuity. Instead we experience accelerated time, speeds that are traumatic, the ground of being collapses, and we witness the true reality of unrelieved conflict between cosmic forces. This revelation climaxes with the looming a-b-y-s-s, a terrifying entry in a non-human world. Or perhaps, even more terrifying, the abyss is the next stage of our human existence.

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Richard Wlodarski 06 August 2017

Perfect analysis, Daniel. And I'm so happy that I was able to pull it off. Considering the stakes! But this is just the preliminary stage. The next stage is going to be a lot tougher. But I'm really looking forward to it! I sincerely believe that the abyss is NOT the next stage of our human existence. But there are forces at work that are striving to successfully accomplish that goal. I think that it's part of my job as a poet to keep shedding light on this matter.

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 06 August 2017

Nice one.... beautiful lilines....10 You shall remain alert And fail their attempt To subvert your mission With their wicked designs

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Indira Renganathan 22 May 2022

Interesting start...as you have said your poem does give a sense of near-death experience...top score

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Indira, thx for visiting and responding. If you wish to get a further sense of that experience, please read Soul's Journey Parts I-V.

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Dr Antony Theodore 03 June 2020

Fear Rising Threatening Paralyzing Demons fighting For victory......you are becoming very much mystical. tony

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Navod Dilhara 31 January 2020

Lots of things have been implied through a single stanza..Enjoyed it..

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Bernard Kennedy 17 November 2019

Good write about other space and existential bridges.

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Richard Wlodarski 18 November 2019

Thank you so much, Bernard. If you can find the time, please read Parts II - V. I'd love to read your feedback.

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Geeta Radhakrishna Menon 01 February 2019

Richard, this is really interesting - a near death experience - a door opening to an unknown territory. Waiting for the series with much eagerness and a thrilling suspense..

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