Chuck Audette

Rookie - 59 Points (Poetry Hell, Vermont)

Spoonerism Picnic

Poem by Chuck Audette

flutter by
while these bees
just nicpic
at our picnic

a delightfully
wasted time
of fruit and cheese
and tasted wine -
but what happened next
made me sick and ill
and to cheese I say “ick”, even still
for, you see,
unseen by me,
a bird in the tree
dropped a turd in the brie

(a Spoonerism is the swapping of the first letter(s) of two words, like a form of dyslexia, usu. resulting in nonsense, but sometimes creating new words which can still somehow make sense in the context. I had never seen a Spoonerism Poem which actually made sense, so tried one here. I think I might have four Spoonerisms and one that's close) .

Comments about Spoonerism Picnic by Chuck Audette

  • Stephen Stirk (3/10/2009 7:12:00 AM)

    Great and funny read Chuck, in your inimitable style. I'm not a great lover of cheese. I doubt I could taste a turd in the brie. Spoonerisms Eh! ! . You've given me an idea
    Best Regards
    Steve Spooner(Report)Reply

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  • Brian DornBrian Dorn (12/15/2006 9:51:00 AM)

    I'm still not sure what a 'spoonerism' is? But, I'm not one to 'nicpic'... funny stuff and awesome word play! !

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  • R H (4/20/2006 7:49:00 AM)

    I thoroughly enjoyed this one Chuck! Your wordplay is enviable. Have you written a 'malapropism' one yet? ? : -) Justine.(Report)Reply

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  • Esther Leclerc (2/23/2006 4:44:00 PM)

    haha, I'd forgotten about 'Spoonerisms' - love 'ick' and 'still' best! ...And what's sweeter than delightfully wasted time? ... LOVE the ending because, well, you know it happens! Very clever and as Ernestine said, nicely constructed too. 10 from a fan!(Report)Reply

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  • Linda HepnerLinda Hepner (1/5/2006 4:59:00 PM)

    Very amusing and a neat way to rhyme, also nicely light in tone.(Report)Reply

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  • Ernestine NorthoverErnestine Northover (12/30/2005 2:35:00 PM)

    This is a nice one Charles, the story leads the way, but the spoonerisms sound really good within it. Very well done indeed. Nicely constructed. Love Ernestine XXX(Report)Reply

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  • Joseph Daly (12/30/2005 2:11:00 PM)

    Nice one Charles. This is put together really well and it's not clever-clever, it works because it flows well.(Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Friday, December 30, 2005

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