Abha Sharma

Stream Of Consciousness

The canvas of Human mind
Conveys the multidimensional kind,
By the three Layers of consciousness
And the double layer of time.

‘Consciousness’ is governed by the clock
Camouflage perceptions in its growth
Mechanical time leads the life
Where birth and death constantly strive

The ‘inner duree’ records the atom
As it falls on the mental plate,
Sub-consciously irregular in its movement
Phases of growth, in the chaotic crate

Thus plays our life’s orchestra
In its imperative cryptic wisdom.

Poem Submitted: Wednesday, May 7, 2008
Poem Edited: Thursday, May 29, 2008

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  • Dipika PDipika P (5/22/2008 3:44:00 AM)

    simply great..gud one!

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  • Egi David Perdana (5/21/2008 5:15:00 AM)

    I'm crying, i'm crying and i'm crying

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  • Vidyadhar DurgekarVidyadhar Durgekar (5/20/2008 8:36:00 PM)

    Three layer of consciousness........................Thoughts of hidden dimension..........tangible existence and intangible faith..........nice poem

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  • Andrew BlakemoreAndrew Blakemore (5/20/2008 2:14:00 AM)

    Great poem Abha. A very thought provoking piece of work. Well done. Andrew

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  • Usha Pisharody (5/18/2008 6:51:00 AM)

    Another great metaphorical poem. You use words to maximum effect, Abha, and they stay true...!

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  • Egi David Perdana (5/17/2008 4:06:00 AM)

    amazing poem I love it

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  • Egi David Perdana (5/17/2008 4:05:00 AM)

    amazing poem I love it

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  • Egi David Perdana (5/17/2008 4:04:00 AM)

    amazing poem I love it

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  • Chom Chom (5/16/2008 8:06:00 PM)

    very nice.......
    from ya pal, Chom Chom

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  • Leonard Daranjo (5/15/2008 5:53:00 AM)

    The mind is an enigma out which emanate continous streams of finished, semi finished and half finished thought. Emerson says 'In every great work of art, you will find your own rejected thoughts - they come back to you with an alienated majesty'

    The Stream of Consciousness is indeed one of my favourite subjects - recalls to my mind James Joyce and Aldous Huxley.

    Your poem is a highly inspired piece and does well to bring out the subtle nuances of the Stream of Consciousness.

    Enjoyed reading the piece. Thanks

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  • Melody Rhymer (5/14/2008 8:19:00 PM)

    So Many metaphores I would have not thought of and put together to explain this deep concept...but you managed well and your river flows through your pen

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  • Malini KadirMalini Kadir (5/14/2008 12:14:00 AM)

    when the rich luxury of time coated the human canvas with the three layers of consciousness........the effective focus on litreature has left a lingering mark
    on the readers mind........hats off to you!

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  • Michael Pruchnicki (5/12/2008 4:23:00 PM)

    I am struck by the number and variety of comments posted about your
    poem. Everyone from James Joyce to obscure philosophers seems to
    be included and their efforts compared to your very good poem, but you
    know as well as I do that Joyce's use of the literary technique of stream
    of consciousness far surpasses any 14 line poem ever composed. And
    that includes all Shakespeare's sonnets!

    But putting aside the somewhat recondite exclamations offered by your
    admirers, I do like what you've written. And I agree with Joy Vanderhelm
    that poetically the lines read better and carry the meaning you intend
    with more force and drama-

    'Thus plays our life's orchestra
    In its imperative cryptic wisdom.'

    regards, Michael

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  • Joy Vanderhelm (5/12/2008 2:13:00 PM)

    Very provocative piece with a lot of layers. A question, though. The end line. Would it not be better to say 'plays' instead of played? I jus think it skews the rhythm a little, but that's only one opinion. Otherwise a multi-faceted and beautiful piece.

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  • Thad Wilk (5/10/2008 11:26:00 PM)

    Abha! A very impressive, fascinating and thought provoking write! ! A pleasure to read! !
    Best wishes! *10*! !
    Friend Thad

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  • Seema Chowdhury (5/10/2008 11:26:00 PM)

    wow, well done Abha.
    this is such a philosophical poem. the words are thought provoking and carries deep sea of meanings in it. its true, in life; s journey we keep on changing paths and jumping from one layer to another according to our maturity, situation and feelings.
    i really like your opening lines as they are very catchy and force the reader to go on to see what is coming next. since i'm an artist who always throw my ideas on the canvas so i can relate my self to these lines very well.
    this poem has universal appeal, i must say. take care

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  • Roland Bastien (5/10/2008 11:13:00 PM)

    Bravo Abha, you are not to far/
    The Taoist master Li Hongzhi wrote in his book zhuan falun: it is a produce of the ten cultivations - the Buddhist Monk Mathieu Ricard, A SCIENTIFIC WHO BECAME MONK, wrote: it's depend entirely on chimical processes in the brain
    In the book, Quantum and the Lotus, Trinh Xuan Thuan, a scientific, in a conversation with Ricard compared it to a subatonic particle.

    Think twice.

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  • Vijay Gupta (5/10/2008 11:14:00 AM)

    poem is good thanks.

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  • Mamta Agarwal (5/10/2008 4:29:00 AM)

    the title reminded me of Virginia Woolf's works. its amazing how our consciousness mooves from one level to another. a chain of associations, we travel back and forth in time. the last two lines are really beautiful. good writing Abha, short and succinct. thanks for sharing.

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  • p.a. noushadp.a. noushad (5/9/2008 2:44:00 AM)

    mystery of human mind and depth of life is depicted in this poem.

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