Tamara Moir

Rookie (22/03/1991 / Brisbane)

Tear Drops And Closed Caskets The Good Die Young. - Poem by Tamara Moir

I went to a party, Mom,
I remembered what you said.
You told me not to drink and drive, Mom,
So I drank sprite instead.

I felt really proud inside, Mom,
The way you said I would.
I didn't drink and drive, Mom,
Even though the others said I should.

I know I did the right thing, Mom,
I know you're always right.
Now the party is finally ending, Mom,
As everyone drives out of sight.

As I got into my car, Mom,
I knew I'd get home in one piece,
Because of the way you raised me, Mom,
So responsible and sweet.

I started to drive away, Mom,
But as I pulled onto the road,
The other car didn't see me, Mom,
And it hit me like a load.

As I lie here on the pavement, Mom,
I hear the policeman say,
The other guy is drunk, Mom,
And now I'm the one who'll pay.

I'm lying here dying, Mom,
I wish you'd get here soon.
How come this happened to me, Mom?
My life burst like a balloon.

There is blood all around me, Mom,
Most of it is mine.
I hear the paramedic say, Mom,
i'll be dead in a short time.

I just wanted to tell you, Mom,
I swear I didn't drink.
It was the others, Mom,
The others didn't think.

He didn't know where he was going, Mom,
He was probably at the same party as I.
The only difference is, Mom,
He drank, and I will die.

Why do people drink, Mom?
It can ruin your whole life.
I'm feeling sharp pains now, Mom,
Pains just like a knife.

The guy who hit me is walking, Mom,
I don't think it's fair.
I'm lying here dying, Mom,
While all he can do is stare.

Tell my brother not to cry, Mom,
Tell Daddy to be brave.
And when I get to heaven, Mom,
Write 'Daddy's Girl' on my grave.

Someone should have told him, Mom,
Not to drink and drive.
If only they'd have take the time, Mom,
I would still be alive.

My breath is getting shorter, Mom,
I'm becoming very scared.
Please don't cry for me, Mom,
Because when I needed you, you were always there.

I have one last question, Mom,
Before I say good-bye.
I didn't ever drink, Mom,
So why am I to die?

This is the end, Mom,
I wish I could look you in the eye.
To say these final words, Mom,
I love you, and good-bye

Comments about Tear Drops And Closed Caskets The Good Die Young. by Tamara Moir

  • (5/26/2010 6:35:00 PM)

    I said it before and I am going to say it again, this is not your poem to be presenting as yours. And this version all of the versions are wrong. I did this in 94 and I am tired of people changing the name and trying to claim it. This is based on a true event and dedicated to her. I don't care about anything else other than stop and respect the girl who did die and that this poem is origionaly about. Her name once again is Natallie and her cross lays on the side of the freeway in Mojave ca. Leave this poem alone! (Report) Reply

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  • (1/14/2010 1:09:00 PM)

    i like this poem but it is sad as well it made me cry (Report) Reply

  • (12/15/2009 12:45:00 AM)

    WeW! ! ! ! ! ! ! !

    luv this poem girl. continue sharing your poems. it chills my flesh.
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  • Aiswarya. T.anish (3/17/2009 9:03:00 AM)

    This is a nice poem but it was not written by you. (Report) Reply

  • (1/30/2009 5:47:00 PM)

    It's a conversational simple poem, I think it falls very short. I get that the content tugs on everyone's heartstrings, but it's not a very good poem. Perfect for those chain emails that it's always in though. (Report) Reply

  • (10/13/2008 1:10:00 PM)

    wow this honestly made me cry, trully an amazing piece! (Report) Reply

  • (1/13/2008 10:35:00 PM)

    This is a tear jerker, and very well done. Does really make one think. And even more so when I am a mother of 5 teens. Thanks! (Report) Reply

  • (10/4/2007 6:51:00 AM)

    i loved this poem it really touched me...i have a sister 17 who has just got her ps and all i thought of was her and how much it would hurt amde me feel sick thinking about how many kids have felt like that and it has happend to...very moving.... (Report) Reply

  • (8/3/2007 10:54:00 PM)

    Excellent poem, well written, very moving! (Report) Reply

  • (5/12/2007 3:35:00 PM)

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  • (5/4/2007 3:44:00 PM)

    I hella like this poem. and the title where did you come up with that?
    i changed my display name on myspace to that. N-E-Wayz nice poem

    Mi$$ Cruz
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  • (5/4/2007 12:02:00 AM)

    OMG, This hit me like a TON of Bricks, I would LOVE to see more like this from you. Please keep writing. With this time of year being Prom season, Do you MIND if I post this on MY MYSPACE PAGE, I have alot of Parents and Kids on there that need to see this. Hope you continue writing great pieces like this. (Report) Reply

  • (5/1/2007 4:06:00 PM)

    Wow! !
    I want to encourage you to write more because this also reminds me of my mom who died last year on 7/21. She was hit by a drunkdriver and it reminds me how i loved my mom. Please write more! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !
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  • (4/25/2007 4:30:00 PM)

    i luv ur writeing it is reli gud may i ask u ur age plz i dont hav a mom soo it waz alo reli touching (Report) Reply

  • (2/10/2007 5:57:00 AM)

    Please make another poem like this beacause it reminds me of mom......
    she died last Aug.3 2006......
    so please make another poem like this....


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  • (12/25/2006 12:08:00 AM)

    I have to agree with Ashley on this one. Tamara did not write this poem and I seriously wish she wouldn't take credit for it. I do know the person who wrote this poem and it was for a Drug Awareness Program meant to straighten kids up and help them cope with their problems (not just drugs) . The kids had to go into this classroom and watch these videos on everything from having sex, to drinking, to studying. Well the student who wrote that was in this class and everyone was asked to write what they learned from the class at the end of the 6 week course. This poem was this student's work for which they definitely got an A but the teacher liked it so much that it was kept and used and continues to circulate in schools even today. So please add credit to your poem somewhere because this just doesn't seem fair to me. (Report) Reply

  • (12/10/2006 11:16:00 PM)

    First of all I would like to say that this poem has impacted me since the first time I read it. As a writer myself, I know how difficult it can be to be original. I do want to discredit the talent of Tamara when it comes to this piece, yet I know for a fact that she is not the original author. Undoubtedly, she has added her own modifications, but the original was published in the book 'Chicken Soup for the Teenage Soul' in the late 1990s. I just feel like credit should be given where credit is due for such an emotionally driven piece. I invite everyone who has not done so to check out the original writing...it still gives me goose bumps every time I read it. (Report) Reply

  • (11/28/2006 11:01:00 AM)

    : (.... wow what a tear jerker... and ur young and u can write poems like this! ! wow u gave me hope! ! ! i will never drink and drive...i will never drink again! ! ! i hope u the best in ur life!

    ^_^ good day to u!
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  • Nicola Burkett (11/18/2006 8:38:00 PM)

    What a very emotional poem....An excellent poem from someone at such a young age...beautifully written...a deff 10 from me! ! ! (Report) Reply

  • (8/31/2006 1:07:00 PM)

    I love this peom. I am 14 years old and I wil never drink. I think it is bad for you. I also think that no one should pay but you if you drink and drive. That touched my heart. I cried.....It is so sad how someone can kill someone by drinking and driving and they not get hurt! PLEASE DON'T EVER DRINK AND DRIVE. I know how it feels to lose someone that wasn't drinking and got hit by a drunk driver. May she rest in peace. You will never know till it happens to you. She could have had a WHOLE life to live. Please thik and make sure you have someone responsible that isn't drunk before you drink!
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Poem Submitted: Tuesday, September 27, 2005

Poem Edited: Monday, May 24, 2010

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