teal sky

Rookie - 0 Points (14 Jan.1996)

The Deadly Dead Dentifrice A.K.A. Mr. Toothpaste. - Poem by teal sky

Brought froM a store brand new
me was inside mY packet blue
which Someone tore in shreds a few
these man-iacs are savages me knew.

me was then kePt In a plastic stand
theRe was a toothpaste of dIfferent brand
his crown was losT, he couldn't WIthstand
the feLony of humans, their fierce hands.

me was then totaLed and tortured in pain
they Twisted my neck, they emptied my contAin
they recKlessly trapped my tears they gained
on my dEathbed, their brushy cane.

me now Void, waiting to diE
they all will come, after eatiNG thEir pie
And when they'll fiNd, my empty inside
i've to ConfidE, i'll be denied.

*as i published this poem, dying Mr.toothpaste got furious and left a threatening message in the poem, what is the message? ? ? ?

hint: _+focus on CAPITALS +_:

Poet's Notes about The Poem

Late Mr.toothpaste was one of the living non-living-things.He was a great teeth cleaner who died fighting bacteria and was betrayed by humans.The humans recklessly used it for their foul purposes.
He will be remembered my his fellow paste-mates.Here is his autobiographic poem.
RIP Mr.Toothpaste.

Comments about The Deadly Dead Dentifrice A.K.A. Mr. Toothpaste. by teal sky

  • (9/7/2012 11:27:00 AM)

    a lively and funny poem.congrats (Report) Reply

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  • Shubham Koul (5/6/2012 5:43:00 PM)

    this poetry was interesting as well as funny.... :) any one would hardly imagine to make a poetry on a toothpaste...which makes this poetry so special..... (Report) Reply

  • Sharad Juneja (4/20/2012 7:15:00 AM)

    vision of a great poet who is one with the poety..it's really beautiful (Report) Reply

  • Aditi Khandelwal (4/16/2012 11:17:00 AM)

    This is so funny....! Love it!
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  • Ramesh Rai (4/16/2012 7:45:00 AM)

    An unique way to write and a beautiful poem also (Report) Reply

  • (4/15/2012 9:45:00 AM)

    a beautiful poem, so strange yet so special... (Report) Reply

  • Neela Nath Das (4/15/2012 9:34:00 AM)

    Oh! I laughed a lot. Really nice.Hey, we shouldn't use toothpaste! (Report) Reply

  • Abhishek Tiwari (4/14/2012 3:43:00 PM)

    Thats a poet budding within u my boy!
    I loved it to the ewtent that..for the 1st time some1s death made me laugg..(sorry Mr. Toothpaste)
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Poem Submitted: Saturday, April 14, 2012

Poem Edited: Monday, April 23, 2012

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