I woke up this morning
Glanced in the mirror
Then without warning
The old hag appears
She looked at me closely
And then rolled her eyes
Sized me up, mostly
And then she just sighs
Used all my make-up, true
Drank most of my tea.
And when she was through
She looked just like me!
Elisabeth Wingle
9-20-15
Oh-oh I am not a fan of free verse but this caught my fancy. You have a way with words young lady I will never give free verse a ten. Lacks discipline
But Wes, it's not free verse, it's completely versed and deseves a 10.
Thanks for the support, Spock the vegan! I am curious about your name. Is it for Dr Spock the pediatrician or Spock the Vulcan... Live long and prosper!
second visit here. i still got a chuckle at the ending! ;) :) please don't come to our front door UNTIL you've used up ALL of your make-up! we have tea. now i'll slap this fun poem into my/our May 2017 showcase for PH poets. thanks. drop me a line sometime; don't forget the worm. bri :) :)
Hahaha! I read your poems. Small and sweet. Simple ideals so neatly presented
Cutesy. I go through the same routine each morning! But with coffee. To MyPoemList. I might change 2 tiny parts to make 'smoother' rhyming. Bri :)
Thanks Tom, it's nice to meet you. Any friend of Wes's is a friend f mine! I'll look forward to reading you poetry!
That's the funniest poem of the day and it's late evening here in the UK. I think we both appeared in Wes's Doodling. which I found after reading your Doodle. And I only gave you a miserable nine. So I'll make up for it with a ten here! Your poem deserves it. It's really brightened up the evening. Thanks
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
I had a long comment almost finished and then I don't know what key I accidentally pushed and it all disappeared and I couldn't get it back. I will try again. This is a great poem. It made me laugh. I always wonder where that ugly old man in my mirror comes from. This is NOT free verse, in spite of what my friend Wes Vogler said. Verses two and three are perfectly rhymed in the pattern ABAB. Verse one is more or less the same, except that the rhyme is not quite perfect. MORNING and WARNING are O.K. together, and there is a partial rhyme with MIRROR and APPEARS. If I could give this a 9.5 I would, but I can't, so I will give it a ten instead.
Thanks Kim, I think we found your first comments! I appreciate your support. I have a newer poem called Vim and Vigor, check it out and let me know what you think Lisa