The Key Poem by Daniel Brick

The Key

Rating: 5.0


I paused twenty minutes into my walk
around Lake Como on a late autumn day.
I opened the kleenix package, and
a bright silver key dropped on the walkway.
The p-i-n-g of silver against concrete
was a musical sound, brief but bright
and pure. What made that a sound of music?
Was it the key, the concrete, my imagination,
or was it a harmony of all three factors?
And the key itself - how did it come to be
stuffed in a collection? Was it chance or design?

I was standing beside and beneath one
of the cottonwoods in which pairs of eagles
sometimes perch, perhaps more often than
we witness. People like me stop and stare
intently on that highest branch, on which
they brood, without a sound or gesture.
Are they as stunned as we are? But no eagle
perching or flying distracted my thoughts.
How does such a small event as the dropped key
loom so large in my mind that it displaces
eagles and its sound equals a melody by Mahler?

This setting is a promenade around the lake
on a leisurely Sunday afternoon on a warm
autumn day. Perhaps it deserves music by Ravel
in his andante disposition to accompany the walkers.
Suddenly, four young women, all of them pushing
a baby carriage, sweep past me in a flurry of talk
about graduation, first nursing job, boyfriends,
all this compressed in the time it takes them
to rush past me and disappear over a small hill.
These are confident, successful, untroubled
young adults, firmly grasping their present duties
and future possibilities, needing no magical intervention.

Oh, how their frivolity belied the genuine reality
of the moment as I saw it. How their future-driven
lives surpassed the four people in their care,
four retarded adults, whose crushed minds confined
them to baby carriages. Perhaps my key will unlock
whatever confines them body and soul and leaves them
unfree in a world of increasing freedoms. And they
may join the frivolity of youth instead premature
dotage. Is this a worthy use of whatever magic
imbues my key, if magic there can be in such
common place things we stumble upon in the sight of eagles.

Tuesday, October 25, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: hope,hopelessness
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Seamus O Brian 02 November 2016

I might suggest another combination which could produce magic of this sort: Lake Como, accomplished poet, autumn afternoon. Surely such satisfying literary fruit must spring from soil of such potential. Thank you, Daniel, another delightful work. Neal

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M Asim Nehal 01 November 2016

A sketch of what you saw painted a fantastic picture through this beautiful poem, It gave me visual effect, thanks for sharing it....And of course a perfect 10+++

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Susan Williams 30 October 2016

Thank you for sharing this stunningly visual and philosophical poem. Tis brilliant writing as always.10

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Daniel Brick 01 November 2016

Susan, I appreciate you see this poem as STUNNING... because writing it was a pleasure. I wrote it as I I walked around the lake AFTER dropping the key, and as things happened during that walk I added them to the poem in progress. This proves that poetry is not fantasy or unreality; it is embedded in the world in which we bustle. BTW Lake Como is man-made lake in St. Paul. I wasn't in northern Italy!

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Nosheen Irfan 28 October 2016

How artistically you show us two sides of life...hope and hopelessness. There is always a key to unlock the doors to joy. Life is strange indeed...a trifle like the falling of a key can have great significance. It can teach us what is important in life...yes, we must have music n harmony. The picture of youthful anxiety is disturbing to the poet but the sight of the key is comforting. We can always unlock the doors of mystery n find the answers. That's the power humans are endowed with. A great write.10

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Daniel Brick 01 November 2016

THAT'S THE POWER HUMANS ARE ENDOWED WITH. Exactly, Nosheen! Thanks for articulating that underlying theme in the background of the poem....ALWAYS A KEY TO UNLOCK THE DOORS TO JOY. This is virtually a line in the poem, a potential line that I didn't think of. Thanks for providing its clarity!

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Bharati Nayak 27 October 2016

Your key unlocks some deep emotions- - - - Why you heard a music in the fall of the key? ' Was it the key, the concrete, my imagination, or was it a harmony of all three factors? ' - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - How does such a small event as the dropped key loom so large in my mind that it displaces eagles and its sound equals a melody by Mahler? - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - What kindness, what beautiful thought is there in your mind when you want the key to find a solution to free the four adults in their dotage confined to wheel chair. - - - - - - - - - - -Absolutely lovely poem.

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Daniel Brick 27 October 2016

Thank you, Bharati, for seeing this as AN ABSOLUTELY LOVELY POEM - I intended to convey only positive thoughts, even though there are ugly and means things in the world. The poetry we write summons our readers to see the overarching beauty and to add to that beauty with their good thoughts. (Shelley on John Keats's death: HE IS A PART OF THAT LOVELINESS HE ONCE MADE MORE LOVELY, That's our mission too! !)

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