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In her eyes
did you see
the long lavender look of goodbye?
Or did you just hear
the sound of wet tires
whispering farewell to the rain-swept street?
Did you ever remember
her skin in the intimacy of failing light
or were you just a passing connoisseur?
Did you become that immune
to the delicacy
of her love in free fall?
Did she ever make you feel breathless
during those days and nights
behind all your barriers, ballustrades and terraces?
Did you not see
that moment in her eyes
when you had finally set her free?
Did you really not know
your lamentations were too late
since she had already risen from the ashes?
Foolish man
how did you not see in her fine eyes
the long lavender look of goodbye?
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~~~~~~~~~~~~~©2017 Susan Williams
Lovely poem. Love the poetic title. Men and women are different in their approach to love. The feelings of a women if she is unhappy, and to be able to see the detachment that her eyes will show even if she is there in a man's arms requires so much sensitivity from a man's side. You brought her feelings out beautifully. Thanks for sharing.
Thank you for reading and sharing what there was about the poem that spoke to you. These are so helpful to a writer! Bless you.
Cont......Your poem describes an incident in which a man, in all his folly, was unable to read and understand what lady expected at the time from him. I'm sure you've had firsthand experience with it or have seen it up close. Such a wonderful flow with apt ending.
Wow...Women have been a mystery to man since they first met on Earth. Knowing what women desire is something no man has ever understood; they all keep guessing and only a few times succeed. Cont.....
It would have been a great novel with a captivating title. To my Poem List. One of your best! ! !
When i saw the title i immediately thought of John MacDonald. His book; however this is totally unlike the book...it is more of a true story...accept maybe the man may have been delusional? In other words, in love with a woman who NEVER loved him. Great write, Ms. Susan! Keep 'em coming! A 10+++++++++++++ 4 sure...
Finally! ! ! ! ! ! ! A fellow lover of a John D. McDonald novel! ! ! ! Whether it was a Travis McGee mystery or a non-serial mystery, he was my favorite mystery novelist as well as commentator on the current affairs of the environment and society. Glad you recognized that shortened title- - I am thinking of doing a series based on McGee titles though not on the plots [he had a way with creative titles]- - hope that doesn't wander in the area of plagiarism....maybe a simple nod in the Author's note would suffice? ? ? ? Anyway, THANK YOU for your comments and your great taste in novelists! And for the 10! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! !