I caught the train to Hell today
A dark and bumpy ride
So many souls were huddled there
Full packed it was inside
With men and women, children too,
It was a great surprise
So many people that I knew
Were set before my eyes
The train, it trundled `long the track
All screeching at a pace
No way was there to send it back
`Twas writ` on every face
Their misdemeanours were all marked
Wrapped up and fully bagged
By Hell`s own wardens they were kept
And prop`ly neatly tagged:
Old Freddie boy who shot his wife
'Because she gave me so much strife'
And little Johnny (heard his cries)
Because he plucked the wings off flies
O then there was that sad old dame
Who spent her whole life on the game
Old Joshua, without remorse,
Had cru`lly battered his old horse
With head in hands, a guy called Frank
Had meanly robbed a village bank
And then a pensioner he mugged
Because, he said, that he was drugged
And then there`s me, O such a crime,
I wrote a verse that didn`t rhyme
And furthermore, I don`t see fit,
The rest of it I should admit
Clickety-click along the lines
Still puffing out its steam
That poor old train came to a halt
Thank God, `twas just a dream! !
Thank God that was a dream coz i felt i was in the train too
What a powerful poem Ms Valene Dohren.. I am too there in another train and I hope it not to reach its destination perhaps. The dream haunts and becomes a nightmare! A Good poem indeed!
And then there`s me, O such a crime, I wrote a verse that didn`t rhyme And furthermore, I don`t see fit, The rest of it I should admit I love this poem. Especially this verse, quite amusing.
And then there`s me, O such a crime, I wrote a verse that didn`t rhyme....these are my best lines.....and this is one sad poem....dived right to the core of my heart. I like this very much....great talent...Valerie.
Another beautifully rhymed and presented poem to enjoy. What more is there to say except thank you Valerie. Take care and I wish you well.
It is great. Excellent rhyming and format.
This here I think, is a great dream/nightmare poem! I loved it. and, all I can say is excellent!
An amazing ride, journey and poem!
a suggestion is-to make things real and lifelike-focus on the Possessions. it creates the scene better and mood enhancements are so much easier. It even makes the character develop. talk about fredys gun, or even the train after mentioning the conductor. but it is a very good poem ^^
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.I would like to translate this poem
I love this. I'm scared though because I myself have plucked the wings off flies - - - Yikes! ! (I was only little though)