Susan Williams

They Have Returned - Poem by Susan Williams

They have returned
I thought they had left
I thought they'd gone for good
and taken their darkness with them.
But that murder of crows
more now than ever before
are gathering and landing
in the vase-shaped tree across the street
where once upon a time a long time ago
the lonely figure of a girl waited the return of her love
and perching there on almost every branch of that vase-shaped tree
they ruffle their inky black feathers and hunch their shoulders
and stare and glare into my picture window
hour after hour they glare and they stare with their malicious black eyes
and bob their heads once then twice
before they rise
rise a dark and unhealthy cloud in the sky
and come swooping and diving across the street and
circle my big fir tree once twice thrice
before sending a squadron winging dark ominous shadows across the lawn
to threaten my porch and its empty winter chairs
and my peace and my quiet life here
and around and around they swirl like an evil wind
and doing their fly-bys they stare and glare into my windows
with their black malevolent eyes they spy on me
and they spin on the tips of their wings and fly by again
cawing and threatening and mocking
before they leisurely return to the vase-shaped tree and landing
each and every one of them on each and every one of its branches
they stare at my home and at me behind the window
the large and so breakable window
with their eyes beady and dark
and hours pass
and they are still there
ruffling their inky black feathers and hunching their shoulders
and staring and glaring into my picture window
hour after hour they perch there in that tree
where once upon a time the lonely figure of a girl waited the return of her love
and they mock and they glare and they stare with their malicious black eyes
and bob their heads once then twice
~~~~~~~~~~~~© susan williams February 8,2020

Topic(s) of this poem: evil

Form: Verse

Comments about They Have Returned by Susan Williams

  • Clinton Siegle (3/28/2020 5:25:00 PM)

    ah yes.. evil souls are returning, as well as those stolen souls, often associated with a raven or a writing desk.. to dream of being free in a tree. thanks for sharing these thoughts with me. (Report)Reply

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  • Edward Kofi LouisEdward Kofi Louis (3/17/2020 1:52:00 PM)

    Black wings! !
    Black feathers!
    Romance of nature! ! !
    Waiting for the bird;
    A lovely girl waiting.

    Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(3/18/2020 1:48:00 AM)

    You are very welcome

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  • Mj Lemon (3/6/2020 11:20:00 AM)

    That girl under the tree would not/could not be Lenore? It's back to my volume of forgotten lore! This goes to myfavourites. A terrific poem, Susan. (Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(3/8/2020 1:06:00 AM)

    You are a detective! ! ! This combines the poem of the vase-shaped tree and the poem about the girl waiting beneath it and these poems about crows! Tisn't Lenore though, she's Poe's heart-throb- this girl is a high school girl who met her boyfriend under the tree across the street. I'm so glad to hear that you enjoy these pieces!

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  • S.zaynab KamoonpuriS.zaynab Kamoonpuri (3/4/2020 4:12:00 PM)

    Cont/.. We Indians prefer and like white creatures and find black creatures even cats scary.
    You wrote such an awesome haunting poem, one of your best indeed.. Kudos for the poetry how you depict and relate.

    Pls do read comment my newest poem too titled, 'pink mania inking

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(3/8/2020 3:05:00 AM)

    I believe I have visited it but I shall double check!

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  • S.zaynab KamoonpuriS.zaynab Kamoonpuri (3/4/2020 4:09:00 PM)

    Nice to see the crows portrayed in a dark ominous way since I have seen whites admire Ravens and crows to the surprise of us Indians who admire white swans instead. I find crows quite scary and here if one is killed then they become vengeful congregations and peck on all passerby. Even in America we've read of crows hurting kids with their pointy beaks. I do feed some outside safely behind my window bars and those seem nice though. Yet I couldn't trust them flying above me. (Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(3/8/2020 3:04:00 AM)

    They are said to be highly intelligent and my granddaughter likes them immensely. But there is something about their eyes and the way they hunch their backs and stare across the street that creeps me out! Thank you for your comments- it is comforting to know that I'm not the only one cringing when they hove into sight!

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  • Poet PoetPoet Poet (2/23/2020 2:56:00 AM)

    PH is not sending any emails of comments so you need to go back and read your own poem and those which you may have read the colour of Royalty of blood and beautiful roses is always red (Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(2/27/2020 10:54:00 PM)

    I am sorry I am not the only one blacked out. Sometimes I think PH wants us to go away. Sigh. Thank you for the note, my friend

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  • Thomas CostonThomas Coston (2/22/2020 6:11:00 PM)

    I love your depiction on this murder of crows. An ominous and menacing bird especially when a flock of them are across the street staring at your window. (Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(2/27/2020 10:45:00 PM)

    And if that wasn't bad enough they came back and there must have been a hundred of them- they darkened the sky and creeped me out! Thank you so much for reading and commenting!

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  • Glen KappyGlen Kappy (2/20/2020 4:25:00 PM)

    hey, susan! first time visiting ph in a while and looking up my " regulars, " you among them. you use repetition well here to convey the effect of these crows on the speaker (you?) . here spring is inserting itself, and the crows, mostly cold weather visitors to our city, will soon fly elsewhere. -glen (Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(2/22/2020 4:00:00 PM)

    they live year round here- -but lately they are behaving oddly, gathering into huge flocks at the school and perching on the roofs and perching on the trees by the parking lot and watching my house across the street and it is getting spooky and I do wish they would fly away but they won't they'; ; be here when the sparrows build their nests to rob them of their young...thank you for looking me up, old friend!

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  • Rose Marie Juan-austinRose Marie Juan-austin (2/17/2020 6:12:00 PM)

    So beautifully crafted and well executed.
    I concur with the wonderful comments of Father Kostas.
    Indeed, this great poem can withstand the test of time.
    Onto my Poem List.

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(2/22/2020 3:44:00 PM)

    Thank you for putting this on your fav poem list and I hope you read it again and again with as much if not more pleasure each time. What can a writer want more than this? ? ?

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  • Rose Marie Juan-austinRose Marie Juan-austin (2/17/2020 6:10:00 PM)

    The title and the opening lines of this marvelous poem
    are so powerful and gripping creating fears to the
    very core.
    And as you go through the whole write, the fear is indelibly imprinted
    right at the mind due to its compelling imagery.
    That murder of crows come alive! !
    The great Poetess expresses in brilliant detail the acts,
    characteristics and the attributes of these dark birds
    making us at close range and witness of this darkness..

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(2/22/2020 3:35:00 PM)

    Oh, thank you for telling me so strongly your reaction to this poem. It was what I was trying to build word after word- the increasing uneasiness, dread and finally fear. Bless your heart for this encouraging comment!

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  • Kostas LagosKostas Lagos (2/16/2020 11:48:00 PM)

    Fascinating poem! Darkness is everywhere! A masterpiece! (Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(2/17/2020 1:45:00 PM)

    Thank you very much for reading and commenting and encouraging a fellow writer!

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  • Bharati NayakBharati Nayak (2/16/2020 4:47:00 AM)

    We want to go away from fear- make ourselves free from dark thoughts - When we think we are at peace in our loneliness, the dark thoughts raise their ugly heads- -A very powerful poem dear Susan Williams- The imagery you used, the expression and words have their desired effect on readers literally and figuratively. (Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(2/16/2020 9:53:00 PM)

    Thank you, Bharati. Those dark thoughts are a pesky, die-hard group, aren't they.? I like how you delve deep into other people's poems- Time-wise it is hard to do and I certainly appreciate your time and effort!

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  • Poet PoetPoet Poet (2/14/2020 2:45:00 AM)

    ////In the autumnal sun all fun
    Undressing every bough...''''''.RMS
    DID U RAD MINE SUSAN ON YOUR GIRL POEM- - - - a long time ago
    the lonely figure of a girl waited the return of her love
    I too love nudity some how
    despite the winter slowly setting in my life
    can't still but enjoy
    the last autumn and spring
    what happiness and small sadnesses
    seasons did bring

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(2/15/2020 11:11:00 PM)

    I like how Girl In Waiting has made a lasting lingering effect on you- that is precisely the effect I had hoped to have on my readers! PH is no longer notifying me of comments made on my poems so I have to spend valuable time looking through each and every poem to make sure nobody has commented and wondering why I haven't responded... PH wake up! @! !

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  • Savita TyagiSavita Tyagi (2/11/2020 7:08:00 PM)

    They have returned with all the evil and ugliness of life. I can't stop linking together the feelings expressed here and what is going on in todays world. Evil seems to reign...... Ecellent poem Susan. Repetition in last lines so powerful. (Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(2/14/2020 12:05:00 AM)

    Thank you, Savita. I am pleased that you linked this poem to the disturbing world around us. I think the better we write the more people can find commonality with our poems. Unfortunately, with this poem the commonality is with evil and darkness. Thank you for noting the repetition- I wondered if it would work.

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  • Valsa GeorgeValsa George (2/11/2020 6:58:00 AM)

    I can sense these murder of crows wheeling and whirling around, orbiting and revolving, cawing, screeching and yawping like locusts let loose creating such pandemonium with their cacophonous and tumultuous sound, destroying our calm. The repetition of certain lines give an added effect to the poem. It suggests something ominous to the serene spot where a girl once waited for her lover. Top marks! (Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(2/14/2020 12:19:00 AM)

    Goodness gracious, you should have written this poem! ! ! You made those crows come vividly alive! ! ! Thank you for remarking on how the repetition affected you.

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  • Spock The VeganSpock The Vegan (2/10/2020 2:45:00 PM)

    Evil crows! I can't wait to get away from your porch. Well written. Thanks. (Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(2/14/2020 12:34:00 AM)

    So far they haven't crashed through the picture window but me and my shotgun are waiting! ! ! Thank you for enjoying!

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  • Jez BurlJez Burl (2/10/2020 8:49:00 AM)

    Brilliant piece. I felt like watching a horror film as I read this poem. Again in a style that is so uniquely mam Susan's. To my treasure chest and 10+++++++++ (Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(2/14/2020 12:51:00 AM)

    Thank you dear Jaz! ! ! I was trying for that creepy crawly effect of a good Alfred Hitchcock movie! ! ! You are sweet to add this to your fav list and giving it high marks- -saves you a visit from the crows! ! ! ! !

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  • Robert Murray SmithRobert Murray Smith (2/9/2020 8:21:00 PM)

    The birds straight out of Alfred Hitchcock. A brilliant pen. Superb imagery taking us there with our fears. Thank you Susan. (Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(2/14/2020 1:00:00 AM)

    I am so pleased that you enjoyed this excursion into Poe land!

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, February 9, 2020

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