SNAKE
Creepy, clammy
Uncoiling, twisting, slithering
Venom in fangs to snap
Reptile
FISH
Finny, scaly
Streamlined to fare
In waters deep n' dreary
Aquatic
Your Cinquain on the snake is realistic. But you say about the fish living in the waters deep and dreary. It is not perhaps so.... I have read somewhere that fish lives a better life in spite of the threat to life from its bigger peers. They live an adventurous life that cannot be dreary like that of a snake.
A good write I am not so skilled at this type of poem, great job.
I see Dinesh Nairs's point. I think deep waters are CALM. Depth may feel dreary to us but for fish it's their natural environment. Beautifully rendered poem.
Both cinquains are interesting and meaningful. Well penned. Thanks for sharing.
I am now introduced to cinquains- I will try my cinquain after enjoying first and studying later, your cinquains. it looks as though you are telling 'meet Mr.Snake' 'meet Mr.Fish! '. Thanks for sharing.
Brilliant Cinquains on Snake and Fish . Enjoyed, Valsa!
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Classy poem..Loved reading it...Good write..