Twin Cinquains - Snake/Fish Poem by Valsa George

Twin Cinquains - Snake/Fish

Rating: 5.0

Creepy, clammy
Uncoiling, twisting, slithering
Venom in fangs to snap

Finny, scaly
Streamlined to fare
In waters deep n' dreary

Tirupathi Chandrupatla 01 August 2013

I see Dinesh Nairs's point. I think deep waters are CALM. Depth may feel dreary to us but for fish it's their natural environment. Beautifully rendered poem.

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Danny Draper 01 August 2013

A good write I am not so skilled at this type of poem, great job.

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Heather Wilkins 01 August 2013

both cinquains are well thought out and written enjoyed

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Dinesan Madathil 01 August 2013

Your Cinquain on the snake is realistic. But you say about the fish living in the waters deep and dreary. It is not perhaps so.... I have read somewhere that fish lives a better life in spite of the threat to life from its bigger peers. They live an adventurous life that cannot be dreary like that of a snake.

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Geetha Jayakumar 01 August 2013

Classy poem..Loved reading it...Good write..

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Turtle lover234 02 July 2019

I like turtles

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Kumarmani Mahakul 25 August 2018

Both cinquains are interesting and meaningful. Well penned. Thanks for sharing.

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Narayana Aghalaya 20 March 2018

I am now introduced to cinquains- I will try my cinquain after enjoying first and studying later, your cinquains. it looks as though you are telling 'meet Mr.Snake' 'meet Mr.Fish! '. Thanks for sharing.

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David Wood 03 August 2013

I like the contrast betwen the two. A great poem.

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Chandra Thiagarajan 02 August 2013

Brilliant Cinquains on Snake and Fish . Enjoyed, Valsa!

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