Valerie Dohren

Gold Star - 6,961 Points (13 January 1947 / Southport)

Untitled - Poem by Valerie Dohren

His name rests tender on my lips
through all the long dark hours –
fond memories of stolen love
my aching heart devours.

I feel his breath upon my face,
his trace upon my breast –
sweet whispers drift across the room
where once we soft caressed.

Then as he gently slips into
the depths where love is born,
within a different time and space
the fabric’s meetly torn.

And moving slowly deep within,
bestowing ecstasy –
I close my eyes upon the void
to feel he's part of me.

But reaching out to keep his touch,
to grasp it while I may,
It’s in the reaching out that touch
evaporates away.

(His misty image fills my mind,
a passing recollection
dancing on the edge of time –
a shimmering reflection) .

Topic(s) of this poem: love

Form: Quatrain

Comments about Untitled by Valerie Dohren

  • Valerie Dohren (6/18/2016 5:44:00 AM)

    Thank you US. I am not active on site at the moment. I am afraid I have no inspiration or motivation to write any more. But I do appreciate your lovely comments, and as always, it is great to hear from you. I do hope you are keeping well. My very best wishes to you. Val (Report) Reply

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  • Unwritten Soul (6/16/2016 9:15:00 AM)

    You know, like always your poem never less than beautiful work of art... truly you are a talented writer...honest, creative, experienced, artistic and gifted (Report) Reply

  • (5/14/2016 2:39:00 PM)

    I am most struck by the unerring beauty of your poem's rhythm.
    You have a fine ear for melody and there is a great depth to your words too.
    I didn't realise we had such a fine poet in the Preston area.
    Tom billsborough
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  • (1/13/2016 2:45:00 PM)

    Valerie-It would be a shame for you to harness your remarkable talent.Perhaps poetry could lead you to a better
    place.I feel your hurt in this ever so poignant poem.I bet you can still beat about all of us would be poets.I'll be
    (Report) Reply

  • Om Chawla (12/14/2015 1:18:00 AM)

    True love transcends beyond the moment and becomes part of being and is forever etched in memory. Sensuousness of the moment is relived in recollection and is a tribute to the loved one. Excellently expressed, Val. (Report) Reply

  • Joe Hughes (11/27/2015 11:33:00 AM)

    Simmering passion, deep loving physicality, great use of words.
    Thank you Valerie
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  • Hans Vr (11/26/2015 9:21:00 AM)

    A wonderful poem, Val.
    The feelings that are expressed are so strong that the reader is very deeply moved.
    Love never dies. Sometimes the best we can do for these very special loved ones
    is to let their tenderness and care and kindness live on in our own being, doing, thinking,
    This poem is a truly a beautiful expression. I pray for your strength and wellness.
    (Report) Reply

    Valerie Dohren (11/26/2015 12:08:00 PM)

    Thank you for reading, commenting, and for your well wishes Aufie, much appreciated.

  • Kavya . (11/18/2015 1:52:00 AM)

    wow what an expression of love! can sense the vacuum created, a brilliant write Mam (Report) Reply

  • (11/8/2015 8:24:00 AM)

    Excellent rhyme and melodious muse. Thanks for sharing.10 points (Report) Reply

  • Shakil Ahmed (11/8/2015 8:21:00 AM)

    fantastic love poem by a great poet, i enjoyed reading the poem, if you find time please read some of my poems and leave your comments (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Sunday, November 8, 2015

Poem Edited: Tuesday, November 10, 2015

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