Rigzin Namgyal

Rookie - 291 Points (9 may / India)

Were You Jealous - Poem by Rigzin Namgyal

..O wicked creature of gossamer wing...
..sashaying by that night i heard you sing....
..you tiny monster how cunningly did you fly..
..that night i saw the murderous, bloodthirsty look in your eye..
..when the sun was in love with another part of the world...
..that's when Bam Stoker's 'dracula' in you grew bold..
..that night i had an angel by my side..
..' were you jealous '..i ask? ? ... why in a group you all allied...
..you bit her many times wen the lights were out..
..marring our world..turning into 'hell' our night out..
..as u clawed your needle into her you heartless 'bitch'..
..you left behind memories in the form of endless itch..
..you could have bit me 'bitch'! ! ! ..suck me till you did quench your thirst..
..stopped that gory adventure for she was my guest..
..your body swole with her innocent blood, you no more looked lanky..
..i wished i were a 'witch'..could have turned you into a donkey..
..my focusing palm, how i wish your 'life' i could get..
..but her besides me, you were lucky, i was tied in the cobweb of her net..
..O mosquito! ! ! ..there's a hell lot to complain..
..that night i thought of poisoning your brain...
..i promise..i will get back to you in the twilight sky..
..every drop of blood of yours, i will suck till it runs dry...
..that night will be the night when upon 'you' i will predate...
...with your blood my 'wounded' soul i ll sedate...

Comments about Were You Jealous by Rigzin Namgyal

  • (10/24/2013 11:11:00 PM)

    Interesting sentiments...thought provoking! (Report) Reply

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  • (2/12/2013 9:41:00 AM)

    splendid indeed the whole time i felt like i was watching some old time horror movie and i love old movies so thank you for the experience ..again bravo (Report) Reply

  • Valerie Dohren (2/6/2013 12:23:00 PM)

    Great write, very descriptive. (Report) Reply

  • Adeline Foster (12/22/2012 12:34:00 PM)

    Good poem. Read mine - Indebted -
    (Report) Reply

  • Vipins Puthooran (12/19/2012 3:52:00 PM)

    'Tis a good write topo markss (Report) Reply

  • (12/19/2012 12:01:00 AM)

    it's indeed amazing with all the features of a murder mystery... (Report) Reply

  • (12/17/2012 3:28:00 PM)

    very powerful, great imagery. excellently composed. (Report) Reply

  • Romeo Della Valle (12/16/2012 2:09:00 PM)

    Deep and Powerful! A well elaborated and crafted write that clearly shows your great abilities and thinking power to interpret your experience! Awesome! Jealousy: the root of all evils! 19+++ Thank you for sharing and keep it up! God Bless You! Romeo-New York City (Report) Reply

  • Neetha Sasidharan (12/15/2012 7:53:00 AM)

    wow...hats off...grt comparisons...nice imaginations...gtr rhymes...kp going (Report) Reply

  • (11/20/2012 7:59:00 AM)

    remarkable! amazing! super! ! you are an excellent poet. (Report) Reply

  • Neela Nath Das (10/23/2012 11:03:00 PM)

    Full of metaphors, imagery. Loved the central thought. Jealousy makes man mad.The allegorical veil is very nice. Undoubtedly, a beautiful poem! (Report) Reply

  • Babatunde Aremu (10/19/2012 3:49:00 AM)

    Jealousy is devilish as vividly describe in this poem. Good message, I like it (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, October 18, 2012

Poem Edited: Tuesday, September 3, 2013

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