Tuesday, August 20, 2013

Winter Cold

Rating: 4.7
Spring is here, yet winter has not left us.
It's a time for blossoms to come forth - but they are freezing
from the cold.
Look out a window and see the bright sun shining everywhere,
see the warmth hanging in the air?
Outside the door, I take a step, my breath I can see blowing
in the wind.
It's cold against my skin and quickly I step back in.
Contented now to watch the warm looking sunshine from a window
within my heated room.
RoseAnn V. Shawiak
Wrote this one in 1976.
Luo Zhihai 21 December 2020
This winter is long fou us! So cold it is!
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Soran M. H 29 December 2019
Such a lovely excellent image in this poem makes readers to feel that cold and watching out from your window too,10++ from me for this lovely piece of work..
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A B Faniki 07 October 2019
Simple and lovely. The hands of winter could be chilly and death. Thanks for sharing
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Richard D Remler 27 February 2019
outside we've got drifts as tall as me, and it's all kinds of cold. Your penning is perfect, like looking right out the window. Pretty good writing there. tyfs
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Aniruddha Pathak 31 August 2018
Yes RoseAnn, Life is a mixed bag. Spring is here, winter has not left us, A good poem reflecting reality,
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SYLVA-ONYEMA 13 April 2018
Spring is here, yet winter has not left us. Nicely portrayed and communicated.
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Dr Dillip K Swain 18 December 2017
Liked the delicate opening line.. Enjoyed reading the write
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Tomas Prato 21 December 2016
Just been reviewing some really bad poems on Poemhunter. Then I came across your poem. Your English is good. The 2nd line: but they are freezing from the cold. You know what that's called? Pathetic fallacy. I am sure you can do better than that. Can you SEE the warmth hanging in the air? Think again! You need another verb there. I don't think you SEE warmth. (And note, you've repeated the word 'see' again in the next line. I'm sure you have a better vocabulary.) There's a lot of potential in this poem, but you need to sharpen your skills a little more. Don't let these insincere flatterers who rave about every poem get you trapped in the delusion that you are top rate. We all need to learn so much more - to craft and shape a true work of art demands discipline. Not this mushy flattery from people who don't know English (and are better off, writing in their native languages!)
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Rod Mendieta 24 August 2017
I value sincerity in whatever guise, whether polished smooth or with jagged edges, though I had misgivings all the way through with this comment, expecting it to end with an invitation to subscribe to the poster's website for an inside look at all the tricks that will turn us all into great poets!
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Istabraq Al Ahmadi 22 July 2016
Deeply felt sensations masterfully cheselled in a way that encourages the reader to take the plunge to explore the beauty of the images whose directness enables her/him to capture the essence of the whole poem. I really liked it. Though, we're suffering heatwave, I felt the chilliness of winter while reading the poem! Yet, I think that the poem addresses something deeply psychological. The opening lines are reminiscent of D. G. Rossetti's Barren Spring
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Spring is here, yet winter has not left us.A beautiful poem.
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