s./j. goldner

Rookie (March 2nd,1984 / USA)

21 And Rising - Poem by s./j. goldner

my words fill in blank memories,
while images of you stay fresh like ocean air—
weaved in my soul like the braids of my hair.

an addict of wrong addictions,
but so sweet is the taste
until you discover—life comes un-laced.

twenty-one and rising:
you were the only love I didn't borrow
kiss me now for I know of no tomorrow.

lost souls are but shooting stars;
I wish I may, I wish I might—
with two black freckles turned to the night.

two decades plus one
and to be a lover was my only care,
when in fact, it's the impossible I dared.

twenty-one and rising:
with nothing to show but sorrow
kiss me now for I know of no tomorrow.

a truth is best hidden between two lies,
you didn't hear it through the goodbyes.
you didn't hear it through the goodbyes.


Comments about 21 And Rising by s./j. goldner

  • (9/29/2018 6:42:00 PM)

    Your mom is still dead....I wonder how are those 3 DUI's on your record? (Report)Reply

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  • Narayanan Kutty Pozhath (5/1/2018 12:05:00 AM)

    Love is far more interesting. Good Poem (Report)Reply

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  • Donnie Wolff (1/19/2018 2:54:00 AM)

    Rules in I must enter 20 characters when all I want to say is,
    It's beautiful..
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  • Yoni Assis (6/6/2010 9:28:00 PM)

    'twenty-one and rising:
    you were the only love I didn't borrow
    kiss me now for I know of no tomorrow'

    Chills.
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  • (1/19/2009 10:54:00 AM)

    'a truth is best hidden between two lies,
    you didn't hear it through the goodbyes'
    .............truth is a well masquerade-r and a conjurer where you are fascinated most times.21 and rising and the rest is enigmatic too......wonder around, thanks for sharing/salu
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  • (1/1/2009 3:38:00 PM)

    Very nicely written. Well thought out. I loved it......10 (Report)Reply

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  • (12/9/2008 11:47:00 AM)

    A poem to be read allowed. I enjoyed the overall flow of the piece. (Report)Reply

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  • Howard The Motivational Poet Simon (11/23/2008 10:35:00 PM)

    Great work. This is really good. Keep going... (Report)Reply

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  • (11/10/2008 8:20:00 PM)

    great composition and imagery..all I can say is..Perfect!
    Keep it up

    God bless
    Alice
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  • (11/10/2008 11:43:00 AM)

    really, really good. Very evocative, love it. (Report)Reply

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  • Ershad Mazumder (10/27/2008 10:51:00 PM)

    No words to say
    No words to hear
    I know better than you
    what do you want to say
    You know better than me
    What do I want to say.

    Thanks dear susan for this great piece. I do love an invisible being. I understand the pain of love.You have a hope to meet your fiance.But I dont have.
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  • ngaio beck (8/21/2008 4:32:00 PM)

    You didn't listen to his silence.


    For what it's worth-I like your 'stuff'
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  • (8/3/2008 9:10:00 PM)

    Not hearing it between the two goodbyes.....you write with an endearing heart and sincerity. God bless you. arya (Report)Reply

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  • Sathyanarayana M V S (8/3/2008 8:22:00 AM)

    This poem is tuned in such mellowed words, instantly takes the reader to your world, kudos
    sathya narayana
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  • (8/1/2008 9:39:00 AM)

    I like it better with the braids of hair compared to the soul rather then the ocean air and how that comes undone. (Report)Reply

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  • (4/9/2008 5:41:00 AM)

    Wow Sus, this is one hell of a poem, no wonder it made it into the Top 500, I love the last stanza, 'a truth is best hidden between two lines', Fan-fncking-tastic! ! ! HG: -) xx (Report)Reply

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  • (4/3/2008 4:04:00 PM)

    great poem, I really like it, Take Care Darryn (Report)Reply

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  • (2/5/2008 9:46:00 AM)

    I keep wanting to reread this. You built so much raw emotion around a simple refrain. Love the style, the way you lay out the words. (Report)Reply

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  • (11/10/2007 3:54:00 PM)

    hmm... such a nice poem. The lines are filled with emotions. cool for me. (Report)Reply

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  • Satish Verma (11/2/2007 11:15:00 AM)

    A raw bruise, still wanting it. (Report)Reply

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Poem Submitted: Monday, May 1, 2006

Poem Edited: Saturday, July 1, 2006


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