Luis Gil de la Puente

((22) I´ll Give You My Eyes

One step forward,
Stand up, please.
Let me explain need and virtue,
the mystery gravitating around you.
Let me break the distance.

A new voice is a return to hope.
Let´s make doves fly,
and forget routine, survival.
A walk, some confidence,
knots untie,
breathe slowly.

I´ll give you my eyes,
and feel you close.
Words tremble, rush,
so many things to say.

How could you preserve yourself sweet
and keep listening with soft ears?

Talking about honey
we discovered sweet voices
need care

Poem Submitted: Thursday, June 29, 2006
Poem Edited: Thursday, August 12, 2010

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  • Sulaiman Mohd YusofSulaiman Mohd Yusof (6/17/2009 3:10:00 PM)

    This is a sweet honey coated poem.An eye opener for lovers.Good job Luis!

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  • Noha El3wdy (5/25/2009 11:46:00 AM)

    brilliant,
    the idea is lovely and your words are delicate

    thanks for sharing

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  • Ashraful MusaddeqAshraful Musaddeq (5/25/2009 4:31:00 AM)

    Excellent idea, love it.

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  • C. P. SharmaC. P. Sharma (12/20/2008 6:55:00 AM)

    Poem with profundity.

    I will give you my eyes,
    Then I shall see through your eyes,
    All distances will eliminate,
    Differences won't incriminate.

    CP

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  • Will Barber (12/18/2008 9:34:00 PM)

    A very moving poem, moving from irony to true love. - Will

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  • Aijaz Asif (11/6/2008 5:31:00 PM)

    a lovely poem written on love, i liked it thanks 10 for this wonderful write
    rgds
    asif

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  • Anjali Sinha (9/26/2008 11:51:00 AM)

    nice give eyes and feel
    oh so close-
    so romantic
    thanks for sharing
    regards anjalie
    (do read mine ARE U THERE)

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  • Little Hatila ;) (8/9/2008 5:24:00 PM)

    wow it was very romantic...good job

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  • Sarwar ChowdhurySarwar Chowdhury (7/8/2008 2:07:00 PM)

    Love is lively here....well done.

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  • Abdelmajid Seghir (4/19/2008 7:52:00 AM)

    if that's a real story, all i can say is God help you! ! lol keep up the good poetry

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  • Cherry Zhai (4/11/2008 12:53:00 AM)

    The title is so moving. The love is so strong.

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  • Jurietta DuraanJurietta Duraan (3/16/2008 5:15:00 AM)

    This is beautiful, portraying sincere emotion... well done.

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  • Janri Gogeshvili (2/28/2008 1:30:00 PM)

    «knots untie,
    breathe slowly».- care poetic with a rhythm … it is important and beautiful

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  • Meggie Gultiano (2/11/2008 3:06:00 PM)

    Just when i needed a very refreshing piece.This come on time..A powerful penning you have..i love this

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  • Lime and Tequila with a Splash of Pineapple (1/30/2008 12:23:00 AM)

    Elegant language, this poem displays a real understanding of the way in which language works.

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  • Joscephine Gomez (4/23/2007 8:59:00 PM)

    This poem draws my empathy with the use of 'voice' more than once, revealing your unconscious acknowledgment of its value, most especially to singers and actors like me. I can also empathize scene-wise. I hear you - the strong person - prescribing a new way of approaching and doing things. The insightful, philosophical you is also observing and analyzing things here in a manner unfrequently thought of. Your comand of English and use of metaphors is noteworthy and the title, very catchy, hitting a person at the core. A very powerful poem, indeed!

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  • Yufen Liou (3/12/2007 9:21:00 AM)

    When sweet voice needs care, can it be sweet anymore?

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  • Anne Jojo (9/1/2006 9:43:00 AM)

    yeah i love this poem.

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  • Pia Andersson (8/5/2006 4:13:00 PM)

    Yes how do you protect love and preserve the shimmer in your eys...what a lovely lovely poem....a shining loving poem from you-Pia

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  • RoJa Mitchell (7/8/2006 12:32:00 AM)

    me gustó mucho.
    en mi opinion es muy bueno..

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