A Dead End Poem by Mehta Hasmukh Amathaal
A Dead End
Though I have reached to the dead end
Still I wish my feelings to be known and be sent
It may, otherwise, remain as closely guarded
No one may come to know how much I have succeeded
I clearly see the opposite side of the river
Boat is in midway and I am down with fever
I fear it may capsize and never reach to the bank
I must admit it all and be honest and frank
People remember everything at the end of the road
They carry it with them as unbearable load
When they look back and seriously think?
They may feel dismay at the fact that their boat might have sunk
It is known fact that one must understand and realize
What can be their fate and must visualize?
Nothing can offer them any peace except self introspection
You can leave peacefully if you have earned respect from all the sections
All those year may have been turbulent for you to face
You might have rushed to tackle it with mad race
Nothing could have prevented you from achieving the success
What would have mattered most is the way to gain the access
To swim across the rough sea and weather is not an easy task
Sky may seem wide open and horizons so vast
Still we try to achieve it by any means or putting on mask
We may feel very safe even though it would have daunting task
Nothing goes as usual in real life with smooth passage
We definitely try to live with honesty and clear message
Something prevents us from following the correct way
We tend to bypass the long way and don’t want to be whisked away
We try to wash away our hand by merely apolising in the prayer
We feel that God is great and may forgive us from this thin layer
We excuse by saying “to err is human” and knell down
We forget to remember that plant may grow only when seed is grown
Good or bad may not depend on our ultimate wish and thinking
He has all the powers to bless you with favor or reward with kicks
So ultimately when you are at the dead end everything will surface
You may feel good and go down with happiness and shine on face
Think of future and live in the present
Past can’t be beacon and darkness should be absent
Go all out for noble way which gives you joy
No to all tricks and never adopt unfair means or employ
‘…Nothing can offer them any peace except self introspection…’ ‘Tis the aperture to view this poem….Thanks Sir.. Ms. Nivedita UK PS 10++
Dear Hasmukhlalji, Thanks for your invite to read and rate your poem 'dead end' We are perhaps sailing in the same boat and as such our feelings match This is the time to introspect through our life's journey and share the profound knowledge with the younger generation. Your poem is a journeyin the same direction. The rhyming pattern of the poem is fine maintaining AA/BB pattern but no of lines you have exceeded the meter length. You can easily correct those by using a few imageriesor metaphors I find the meter counts of stanza 2 as most appropriate for this type of poem. A few friendly suggestion- 1) S1 L2- a typo 'know' should bre 'known' 2) S1 L 4 can be changed to 'no one may learn how much I succeded' This wil also create an inter-rhyming with third line. 3) S 2 L 3 'AT' can be deleted as superflous. LIKED THE POEM. RATED HIGH Rajkumar
Lots of good ideas and great ending. Poem is important enough that misspellings should be attended to.
Man so much wisdom in this poem I wonder what to do when I reach a dead end. HOW DO I CARRY MY LOAD IF IT IS TOO HEAVY. heh I don't know, An Awesome poem, thanks for sharing
Nothing goes as usual in real life with smooth passage We definitely try to live with honesty and clear message Something prevents us from following the correct way We tend to bypass the long way and don’t want to be whisked away We try to wash away our hand by merely apolising in the prayer We feel that God is great and may forgive us from this thin layer We excuse by saying “to err is human” and knell down We forget to remember that plant may grow only when seed is grown ............... This is a wise philosophic point of view. I like it. Adnan,
The poem conveys a lot of important and relevant message to people in all stages and walks of life. Lines that impressed me the most are: To swim across the rough sea and weather is not an easy task Sky may seem wide open and horizons so vast Still we try to achieve it by any means or putting on mask We may feel very safe even though it would have daunting task I enjoyed reading it a lot and began self-introspection. Please continue scattering your invaluable words of wisdom all over. I'll read all your other poems, too.
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4/24/2024 11:40:45 AM # 1.0.0.1119
your words are like pearls of life