A Diary Five (La Isla Mambo) Poem by Ahmad Shiddiqi

beautifull poem, nice wordings.posted 10 surya

Lovely

A wonderful poem..........10++++++ Love & hugs.

Makes for an exiting read with all the vivid images and action words. Nicely done.

Your poem is as full of emotions as the love poem. You are also charming readers with words. It is 'heated writing' :) I like it. They pleasantly are reading and nice written. :)

I like that you wrote a poem for Lynda Robson.

A Diary Five (La Isla Mambo) (dedicated to Ms. Lynda Robson, a poet friend at poemhunter) by my love-longing for you only is your heart not softened? I am a wild tiger a hunted one longing like downward swoop of an eagle for angels and mermaids make your love the mouth of Summer dew is a rosebud like the advance of flames in sunlight like sweetness of honey plunged into our soul am I truly considered as your darling angel? I have found my future in your bed of roses nevertheless you run to seek your destiny Ahmad Shiddiqi I love this poem. I could not find the ine that you suggested, I might be doing something wrong. What is La Isla Mambo? Like the dance? Spanish adds extra spice? A wild tiger a hunted one is pretty good. Nice image. The 'advance of flames in sunlight' is really good. I use the word 'like' as little as possible, simile, I just do the metaphore thing. So it would not be like the advance...but it would be...advance of flames. Clear, crisp, unhindered, no camparison. Honey plunged into your soul...wow, sweetness, nice but then a contrast...the plunge, almost forced. Please Ahmad let me know what you think.

I have found my future in your bed of roses nevertheless you run to seek your destiny yes despite all she should hve choice for destiny and us explosre it.....10 read mine si must go....come home... no separate ways

nice poem, well done

last four lines are superb!