A Diary Five (La Isla Mambo) Poem by Ahmad Shiddiqi

Ahmad Shiddiqi

Semarang, Central Java, Indonesia

A Diary Five (La Isla Mambo)

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(dedicated to Ms. Lynda Robson, a poet friend at poemhunter)

by my love-longing for you only
is your heart not softened?
I am a wild tiger
a hunted one

longing like downward swoop of an eagle
for angels and mermaids make your love
the mouth of Summer dew is a rosebud
like the advance of flames in sunlight

like sweetness of honey plunged into our soul
am I truly considered as your darling angel?
I have found my future in your bed of roses
nevertheless you run to seek your destiny

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Fiona Davidson 16 February 2009

Lovely dedication to a lovely lady...thanks for sharing it...10++

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Anthony Foster 16 February 2009

You have a silver tongue, very discriptive.

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Rajaram Ramachandran 18 February 2009

Very nice to read the diary five.

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Is this the impossible love your heart longs for? A ten from me.

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Hannah Russell 18 February 2009

This is very good can u read some of mine i think i need a little work on some of them anyone will do

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Aldo Kraas 08 August 2010

I like that you wrote a poem for Lynda Robson.

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Mario Rios Pinot 17 September 2009

A Diary Five (La Isla Mambo) (dedicated to Ms. Lynda Robson, a poet friend at poemhunter) by my love-longing for you only is your heart not softened? I am a wild tiger a hunted one longing like downward swoop of an eagle for angels and mermaids make your love the mouth of Summer dew is a rosebud like the advance of flames in sunlight like sweetness of honey plunged into our soul am I truly considered as your darling angel? I have found my future in your bed of roses nevertheless you run to seek your destiny Ahmad Shiddiqi I love this poem. I could not find the ine that you suggested, I might be doing something wrong. What is La Isla Mambo? Like the dance? Spanish adds extra spice? A wild tiger a hunted one is pretty good. Nice image. The 'advance of flames in sunlight' is really good. I use the word 'like' as little as possible, simile, I just do the metaphore thing. So it would not be like the advance...but it would be...advance of flames. Clear, crisp, unhindered, no camparison. Honey plunged into your soul...wow, sweetness, nice but then a contrast...the plunge, almost forced. Please Ahmad let me know what you think.

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Mehta Hasmukh Amathalal 16 September 2009

I have found my future in your bed of roses nevertheless you run to seek your destiny yes despite all she should hve choice for destiny and us explosre it.....10 read mine si must go....come home... no separate ways

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Akram Awadat 30 May 2009

nice poem, well done

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Malini Kadir 18 May 2009

last four lines are superb!

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Ahmad Shiddiqi

Semarang, Central Java, Indonesia
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