A Failure In Love Poem by Mohammad Muzzammil

A Failure In Love

Rating: 4.9

Oh, how sever the heart's pain,
In the love, did what I gain,
Writhing my heart and eyes rain,
I forget her, but in my dreams remain.

First awoke my sleeping emotions,
Promised with me to stay lifelong,
Her lovely eyes made in me commotions,
And sang to me a false love song.

Likely she loved me as showed her gesture,
So, I proposed and gave her gifts and rose,
But, her return taught me a lesson for future,
Cause I was given only tears and pathos.

Ruined me her coral lips and rosy cheek,
I sacrificed my everything and too, myself,
In a diana a tender heart I tried to seek,
But, given me faithlessness by my elf.

Lament! For her I lost my delights,
And like blind believed did what she speak,
I missed her badly all days and nights,
But, she pushed in ditch from the love-peak.


maka (kat) albarn 13 July 2011

its very dep rooted and heartfelt. I will say most of the time we really can't understand what love is but love to me is that you would jump in front of a bullet to save that one person u love and they will do it back if they really loved you. But to me she did say she loved you but she never really asked herself if she loved you. If someone says they love you, make sure they do, make sure they will do anything to see you happy and you do the same with them. I rate this 10 of 10. Keep up the great work! =)

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Ifeanyi Eze 02 July 2011

A very lovely written poem, she pushed in ditch from the love's peak, nice work...

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Hilton Ball 07 July 2011

love is a state of mind that one never seams to find you can never understand it never truely get it but it happens and one of you will be hurt the guy is most of the time becuase the girl might have had a nother guy friend or several guy friends but non the less i like this poem thanks for the invite

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Mohammad Akmal Nazir 16 April 2011

The poem reflects your deep feelings for someone whose favour you could not win. It's a lamentation of a broken heart but I suggest you to make this lamentation universal and the you will relish your pain. Pain is an obligatory condition before you hug happiness. So cherish your pain.

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Malaya Roses 16 April 2011

Love could do more than mind can think of. The poet wrote this poem with care and cautious with rhythmic ending for better sounds and structure. So do in love, human keep trying to hold the same beauty & consistency but lies and deceits shall damage it all. Well done.

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Mahtab Bangalee 07 October 2019

Likely she loved me as showed her gesture, So, I proposed and gave her gifts and rose, But, her return taught me a lesson for future, Cause I was given only tears and pathos...// wow beautifully penned

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Heather Wilkins 26 May 2013

a failure in love, but there will be many more in the future. nicely written with a touch of sadness

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ijlal Haider 15 December 2011

true feeling in your words....

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Randolph Valeza 21 August 2011

gee! what a nice poem. it makes me remember my past. thanks for sharing this. i thought im the only one who has this kind of past

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Kemi Kemms 16 July 2011

While I was looking at your list of peoms I noticed 'A failure in love' right away. I am in a similar situation and I found myself in the poem. You wrote just how I feel and I believe half of the world feels as love comes and go, sometimes we don't appreciate true love enough, and false loves leave us broken... leave biggest stamp in our souls and that's when the greatest poems begin!

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