Shahzia Batool

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A Kid's Oath! - Poem by Shahzia Batool

(composed on Universal children's day-2011)

I'm a lovely kid of my small house
With sprightly, sparkling eyes...
Holding my computer's mouse
aspire to shine and rise...

With extra care i take my food
And play my games, but then...
i get scared of Mamma's mood
When someone takes my pen...

When Papa says, 'you'll have to work',
I keep on studying books...
When Mamma says, 'it's time for rest'
I pass her grateful looks...

I'm fond of juicy, chocolate creams,
And want to be a Sultan...
My glittering eyes are rich with dreams
I see for Pakistan....

I love my lovely home and school,
And love my friends and teachers...
I'll guide and work and follow rules
And make my better future... :)

Comments about A Kid's Oath! by Shahzia Batool

  • Amitava Sur (3/22/2014 10:48:00 PM)

    A lovely innocent dream /oath having no blemish or scar..... very nice (Report) Reply

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  • Ramesh Rai (2/17/2014 11:59:00 AM)

    I search that kid where she is lost. (Report) Reply

  • Kanav Justa (12/19/2013 11:16:00 AM)

    When Papa says, 'you'll have to work',
    I keep on studying books...
    When Mamma says, 'it's time for rest'
    I pass her grateful looks...

    haha, , these lines remind me of my childhood, , , ,
    (Report) Reply

  • Queeny Gona (11/4/2013 5:08:00 AM)

    Very pleasant, optimistic and delightful read dear Ms. Shahzia Batool Ji. I loved the way you have expressed your childhood experiences! (Report) Reply

  • Heather Wilkins (9/1/2013 11:55:00 AM)

    excellent write Shahzia offering hope for the future. nice (Report) Reply

  • Geetha Jayakumar (8/18/2013 2:33:00 PM)

    Beautifully portrayed Shahzia...Loved reading each lines... (Report) Reply

  • Passionate Reader (6/30/2013 3:53:00 PM)

    well conceived, well portrayed! ! !
    Actually i wanted to quote my favourite lines but then i thought i can't quote the whole poem in my comment.... :))
    it's a fab poem! ! !
    (Report) Reply

  • Sun Shine (6/3/2013 1:11:00 AM)

    amazing.... well written... (Report) Reply

  • (5/19/2013 4:18:00 PM)

    How can you miss with this! (Report) Reply

  • Valsa George (4/18/2013 6:28:00 AM)

    simple in diction, but cute in tone to suit to the mindscape of a kid! ! (Report) Reply

  • (4/17/2013 3:23:00 AM)

    You understand, Shahzia, what it is you wrote, and much of why you wrote it.
    I will primarily take away that which tends to confirm my own experience.
    It is, incidentally, far more than enough- and quite beautiful.
    (Report) Reply

  • Don Ketchy (1/4/2013 11:21:00 AM)

    the clarity with which you remember is awesome....bless (Report) Reply

  • Aparna Pathak (12/24/2012 6:21:00 AM)

    beautiful poem dear Shahzia... you took me to my childhood...feeling nostalgic... (Report) Reply

  • (11/29/2012 4:13:00 AM)

    The kid who is still living in you is perhaps lost in the reminiscences of your long lost spring that quite hurriedly left you. Or else you are transporting yourself into the selves of many kids around you and are speaking for all of them. Also remember such kids want to live beyond this December and kindly don`t wish for their eternity or wait for their mere extinction.. This humility in a poet like has to be accoladed with all deserving praise. Long live overgrown poet prodigy Shahzia. (Report) Reply

  • Sun Shine (11/26/2012 2:50:00 AM)

    A dedicated kid's promise.. :)
    a passionate kid :)
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  • S.zaynab Kamoonpuri (10/30/2012 3:13:00 AM)

    Wow one of yor best i soo enjoyd dis fabulous rhymin poem! So sweet on those growin children. (Report) Reply

  • Meena Mustafa (7/3/2012 10:56:00 PM)

    simple and sweet :) Long Live Pakistan (Report) Reply

  • Lasoaphia Quxazs (6/23/2012 10:20:00 AM)

    The child is the innocent one, but he/she has to grow up once. And most people do not became a Sultan. (Report) Reply

  • (6/22/2012 2:02:00 AM)

    loveliest i ever read [3 (Report) Reply

  • (6/22/2012 2:01:00 AM)

    loveliest i ever read [3 (Report) Reply

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Poem Submitted: Wednesday, March 14, 2012

Poem Edited: Saturday, May 4, 2013

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