A Life Cycle Poem by David DeSantis
A Life Cycle
The most painful dawn,
one can ever know,
is the painful death,
of love let go.
Gone with its passing,
Are more than just dreams,
A flower shall wilt,
As jealousy teems.
The most painful noon,
One can ever see,
Is the painful death,
Ofyour mothers dream.
Gone with her eyes,
Are the reflection of you,
As a mirror shall break,
So shall you too.
The most painful day,
One can ever feel,
Is the painful death,
Of the ideal.
The mirror once broke,
Shall repair a new,
But in its reflection,
A darker view.
The most painful dusk,
One can ever taste,
Is the painful death,
Of your lovers face.
Gone with her smile,
Are the remnants of wonder,
Impossible to hold,
When buried asunder.
The most painful eve,
One will ever fight,
Is the painful death,
Of dawn to night.
While life is a trial,
Filled with ladders and rope,
There is nothing more painful,
Than forgetting to
hope.
Copyright (c)David DeSantis
This is amazing. The flow, the emotion and clear expression of pain... wow. I wish I could write like this. You are truly creative, and i think this is one of my many favorites of yours.
This is incredibly well told, skillfully written with such a strong emotional chord WOW! Love duncan X
...dawn, noon, day, dusk, eve i was so rapted in deducing of the cycle, that i did not notice at first, that the night is mysteriously missing :) No painful nights? Wonderful conceptiontion and execution. Let me read it again.
Wonderfully captured emotions David, not a word out of place or wasted. I love how you used the different times of the day to represent each painful stage of lost love. Brilliant (this is going in my favs!) HG: -) xx
Nicely crafted. I like the format. I like all your metaphors. This one is very striking for me. The mirror once broke, Shall repair a new, But in its reflection, A darker view “There is nothing more painful, /Than forgetting to hope.” This is especially meaningful since you aligned it with eve and dawn.
I have to say this was amazing. Your vocabulary, the emotion, flow, rhyme perfection. The mirror once broke, Shall repair a new, But in its reflection, A darker view. - what awesome lines..A good read in every way
It does mimic the life cycle very well. I suppose you wrote this in a very dark hour, because your other poems are so fair and hopeful. The point of this was, after all, to not forget to hope Delilah
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
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12/5/2025 2:08:28 AM # 1.0.0
This one is going straight into my favorites - penned with such eloquence and insight, you masterfully attach the pain and potency of loving to time's passing light...powerful stuff here David - love it. j xx