Susan Williams


A Modern Love Story

Poem by Susan Williams

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She eats apples. He eats bread.
This makes his face grow red.
She eats bread. He eats bread.
Even this makes his face grow red.
She once was a happy girl. He was once a happy boy.
Let's sacrifice the bull, shall we?
She once was a happy girl. Happy he never was.
Now she is a parrot nodding her head
Hopefully in time before his face grows red.
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~~~~~~~~~~© 2020 susan williams

Topic(s) of this poem: abuse, marriage

Form: Verse


Comments about A Modern Love Story by Susan Williams

  • Bernard F. AsuncionBernard F. Asuncion (7/1/2020 12:54:00 AM)

    An abuse of marriage is against
    the will of God. Marriage that lasts a lifetime
    glorifies the Almighty.
    Splendid poem....10+++(Report)Reply

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  • Khairul AhsanKhairul Ahsan (6/7/2020 11:00:00 PM)

    Happy childhood contributes in making one into a happy man or woman.
    I love the poem but am confused whether it is a modern love story, or one of old days!
    In modern days, I have seen many men turn into parrots to avoid quarrels and cataclysms.(Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(6/15/2020 1:05:00 AM)

    Thank you for reading and letting me know it was not clear to you- it helps to know when one has been missing the target. The woman tries to please the man at first because she loves him then in time only so he won't be so angry and displeased with her...The onlookers know that theirs has never been a happy union for he is the type of man who cannot be pleased. A sad tale indeed

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  • Me Poet Yeps PoetMe Poet Yeps Poet (5/25/2020 11:24:00 AM)

    when riders ride they ride like ALEXANDER THE GREAT THEY NEVER LOOK BACWARDS
    WHERE'S MY VALET AND THIS DO READ S W PLEASE
    lovely must have been her or horses will you help e find mine to coz she wears nothing but.. her
    At a swimming pool I have lost my romantic heart.
    so have I looking for her in the sea she has nothing on but glee smile please(Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(5/25/2020 3:59:00 PM)

    well, I am confused! ! ! is this a comment on one of my poems?

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  • Keith BrownKeith Brown (5/18/2020 7:48:00 AM)

    A lot more bread and apples been flying around in isolation
    Good poem too the point(Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(5/19/2020 1:51:00 PM)

    Too bad there can be too much togetherness. Thank you for reading and commenting and the sense of humor!

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  • Soran M. HSoran M. H (5/16/2020 11:42:00 AM)

    Part 1/ excellent poem, writing little and good quality, We are happy to see your new poem, as usual it is professional poem it sheds light on the long relationship but in symbolic and metaphor ways, with very funny and strong ending..
    Now she is a parrot nodding her head
    Hopefully in time before his face grows red(Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(5/17/2020 12:57:00 AM)

    Soram, it pleases me to no end when a poem of mine touches your heart and mind- you make me feel welcome to write as few or many as I can given my huge writing schedule with my series of novels.

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  • Soran M. HSoran M. H (5/16/2020 11:41:00 AM)

    Part 2 Really you are right, A life of adventure is good health food for the imagination of a writer, but the life itself will be an adventure for most of us in some points, not every poets can use the food metaphor in the right place successfully, but thankfully our dear poet Susan did, furthermore even both can be parrot and eventually nodding their head for each.. well done Susan 10/10 it is great piece of work.. add to my fav list as well(Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(5/17/2020 1:01:00 AM)

    Sorrt must write quick ph is sebding e from poem to poem

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  • Mj Lemon (5/15/2020 11:45:00 AM)

    This one goes straight to myfavourites! I see the red as jealousy...unfounded, but present. It's destroying even the simplest of activities in this couple's life. I suspect even the parrot will not be enough to make it subside. Brilliant, Susan, and a perfect 10!(Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(5/17/2020 12:45:00 AM)

    Hey, Mj! ! ! ! You know how to make a writer feel good about herself! ! ! ! Thank you, I needed an uplift today! ! !

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  • Valsa GeorgeValsa George (5/15/2020 6:43:00 AM)

    When a man and a woman with different tastes come together in marriage, there is always the chance of quarrels and exchange of harsh words. The redness coming to the man's face is suggestive of anger and unpleasantness! To avoid a brawl, she turns into a parrot, not uttering anything, but nodding to his whims in a mechanical way. There is neither love nor life. You have cleverly drawn an impressive picture of modern love.(Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(5/17/2020 12:34:00 AM)

    Thank you, Valsa, You have no idea what it means to have a woman of sensitivity and intelligence read a poem and see right to the heart of the situation and people. You are an astute poet as well as possessing a pen that spins magic spells

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  • Sandra Feldman (5/15/2020 1:24:00 AM)

    Life does not guarantee
    Happy love stories
    No matter how much
    We dream of them
    Or in romantic films
    Happy endings see,
    Unfortunately...


    The ambiance, in this very well written poem is tense, the color red heightens the sad unhappiness and denounces the offense of lack of love. So sorry.(Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(5/17/2020 12:24:00 AM)

    There are way too many marriages of this type- even if it is: " : only" the bullying type. The corona-virus is also bringiing out the nasty in people. Thank you for your always astute comments

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  • Prabir GayenPrabir Gayen (5/15/2020 12:12:00 AM)

    She once was a happy girl. Happy he never was.
    Now she is a parrot nodding her head
    Hopefully in time before his face grows red.(Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(5/15/2020 1:10:00 AM)

    Thank you for pointing out the lines you responded to!

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  • Susan WilliamsSusan Williams (5/15/2020 12:03:00 AM)

    A Modern Love Story is the real title- PH wanted to jam the words together and while changing it in some places, it refuses to change it here. But then again, some day I will return to it and they will have restored its original title. Sigh.(Report)Reply

    Susan WilliamsSusan Williams(5/15/2020 1:07:00 AM)

    They finally fixed the title- -but now I look silly for complaining about a corrected title. Really and truly fir a while it read Amodernlovestory! ! !

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Poem Submitted: Thursday, May 14, 2020

Poem Edited: Thursday, May 14, 2020