Girl In Waiting Poem by Susan Williams

Girl In Waiting

Rating: 4.9


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the girl waited beneath the golden tree
the golden tree shaped like a vase
a vase of golden leaves
a vase of shimmering golden leaves
a vase of trembling shimmering golden leaves
the girl waited there beneath the golden tree
beneath the end of the season tree
shedding leaves fall after fall year after year
upon the cars in the high school parking lot
shedding leaves now on the girl waiting
on the girl waiting and waiting shivering
shivering and quivering in the chill autumn wind kicking up
kicking up flurries and scurries of all things fallen
fallen and discarded
test papers and pop quiz papers tumbling and wind-chased
and fast food wrappers and soft drink cups rambling and roving
while she waited there among all her fallen memories
waited while memories mixed with all the golden leaves
waited while the chill autumn wind came swirling
came swirling and whirling with the leaves
came swirling and whirling and whispering and weaving
weaving in and out of the long fall of her golden hair
whispering in and out of the shimmer
the sheen and shimmer of the long golden shower of hair
of the teenage girl
of the broken teenage girl
of the tiny fragile broken teenage girl
waiting beneath the golden tree shaped like a vase
waiting for her boyfriend to come back
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~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~©2016, Susan Williams

Girl In Waiting
Tuesday, October 25, 2016
Topic(s) of this poem: fall,falling,heartache,love and life,relationships
COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Aarzoo Mehek 25 October 2016

You left me broken, vulnerable and fragile... Yet I'am waiting to be embraced by life. Beautifull and touchy poem Susan.10++

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Dr Dillip K Swain 20 August 2022

You have provided us a beautiful portrait of a teenager. Marvelous poetry

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Susan Williams 27 August 2022

Dr Dillip, thank you for reading this poem, I live across the street from this tree and the teenagers going to school

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Belle Wassermeister 28 June 2021

I love the unique format of this poem. Certain parts repeated and new parts added. I am blown away by the effect!

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Susan Williams 27 August 2022

Belle, thank you so very much for the feedback on this format---I wondered if it would have the effect I wanted

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Susan Williams 05 August 2020

Wow! ! ! Robert! ! ! What a beautiful comment! ! ! I thank you very very much for encouraging me like this. Bless your heart for caring about your fellow poets here at PH.

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Magadha Rani 24 January 2020

of the teenage girl of the broken teenage girl of the tiny fragile broken teenage girl...beautifully expressed! A wonderful poem dear mam! Thank you for sharing.......10+++ (Magadha)

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Susan Williams 30 January 2020

thank you for the kind words and for those starry-eyed tens! ! !

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Lyn Paul 23 October 2019

Captivating words that kept me waiting.

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Susan Williams 23 November 2019

Hahahahahahaha- -well phrased, Lyn Paul. Glad you were captivated!

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