A Prayer - Haiku Poem by omar ibrahim

A Prayer - Haiku

Rating: 4.6

O God almighty,

sacrifice for you what then

if life is so cheap?

Chigemezi Nnadozie Wogu 30 August 2010

very simple and thoughtful

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Ravi Sathasivam 31 August 2010

Great thought and good beginning Simple haiku and well penned Thanks for sharing with me

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Vyktor Ekott 01 September 2010

Nice one there. I think I get the flow. You're good. Keep it up

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Allemagne Roßmann 03 September 2010

I asked the question so many times And God said he is speechless in speech for the speech is there only when we are speechless.

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Seyyed Bagher Mirshojaee 05 September 2010

Dear Omar Regarding the definition of haiku this poem can not be considered as a haiku because images will be given in 17 syllables arranged in three lines containing five, seven, and five syllables respectively and there should be a type of relationship among these images which mainly have seasonal references as far as I know. I don't care about the form but regarding the meaning from my viewpoint you did a good job. In the third line you mentioned an important critical point regarding the Islamic concept of sacrifice (killing sheep) so life is cheap has deep ironic meaning in my opinion life for the sheep is cheap or for human being or for the poet who understands the concept of life which makes your work as a piece of art because we sacrifice to escape at the expense of an animal's life. This is my reading of it which is different from other friends who have the right to see from their own cultural and religious perspective. All in all it is a thought provoking poem. Thank you for sharing. Hope to read your other successful poems.

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Derek Haughton 09 December 2011

The form, at least the syllable count, is correct. Who could quarrel with the content....

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Leela Devi 25 November 2010

-prayer is heart of life and faith-i like your poems.hope to read more

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Ershad Mazumder 29 September 2010

Life is never cheap. So sacrifice it for truth. Thanks Omar.

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Keyaki Zelkova 15 September 2010

Hi, Omar Ibrahim, I think you have the essence of Haiku. What is good about your poem is that you know how to express yourself in poetry, that is a great asset to be a good poet. As to the rules of Haiku, Seyyed Bagher Mirshojaee is right, i.e.5-7-5 and nature oriented. However, if you look at Haiku Quarterly(http: //dspace.dial.pipex.com/town/park/yaw74/HQ.htm) , there are a string of what they call 'Haiku' which are stretched or diverted from the origin. Having said that as a Japanese, I personally prefer and recommend that beginners in particular should stick to the traditional Haiku rule till they get a knack for it. My advice for YOU is keep writing till you feel comfortable with your work. Keyaki

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Manuel Odeny 14 September 2010

Meditating and simple, you are on the right road to being a better poet.

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