# # A Soul - Part Three Poem by Samanyan Lakshminarayanan

# # A Soul - Part Three

Rating: 3.9


As my dad came towards the cradle
to see me
ignoring my mom in total
she could see life and love in his eye
anger and alcohol has shown up
'red' in those all these days...for her to see

seeing me..touching my tender hands
feeling my face and hair
this rough man missed 'softness'
for the first time in his life
he stood there happy and confused
this intoxication was new to him

he could not stop coming to see me
he did come every day
he did start talking to my mom
it was about me..only about me
he learned to carry me from my mom
a thrilled dad he became

on the day of discharge
as he carried me through the corridor...
all people who knew him stood exclaimed

COMMENTS OF THE POEM
Seema(Aanamika) 80 20 December 2009

Ur poem is very close to reality im inspired by ur poem, it really touched my heart..10+

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Patti Masterman 16 December 2009

Well it certainly sounds as if it were a redeeming experience for someone in need! Also you needed your dad and it was fitting he needed you too.

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Ency Bearis 16 December 2009

a beautiful ending......well done....10

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Rajaram Ramachandran 15 December 2009

The reunion of a drunkard soul is seen here.

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Joseph Poewhit 15 December 2009

Portrays a soft touch of redemption in a new life. [ children are a gift of GOD ]

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Sivashanmugam Shanmugam 01 January 2010

part 3... while reading it seems a prose.in my opinion, the thread can be more shapen as a prosody..any how it gives pleasant look...nice

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Maitreyee Joshi 30 December 2009

a child is a part of us.not a soul is hard-hearted enough to be softened by just a glimpse of his child.

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Nivedita Bagchi SPC UK 26 December 2009

‘…this intoxication was new to him…’ Climaxing and turning point…well addressed poetically… Ten+ Ms. Nivedita UK

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C. P. Sharma 26 December 2009

Innate love for self perpetuation is the driving force in life. CP

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Mamta Agarwal 23 December 2009

Samanyan, yes, babies can transform lives and people in ways totally unexplained. isn't that's why they tell a couple having trouble to make a baby in the hope it will save the marriage. a very tender write. i totally agree with what Nikunj has said. was away for a week.thus the delay in reading this heart touching poem. Mamta

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