I'm looking
out of the window
as I hear someone calling me
A young girl comes to the window
and says I'm your daughter Lily
from the year 2033
Your trapped in a coma
that's why you see
images through a window
that looks as real as me
Your in a coma like dream
Inventing the world you see
just waiting to wake up in the year 2033
Did you really think
You was writing poetry
Did you think
it came from your mind
I'm by your side
at your hospital bed
waiting for a sign
fascinating write! I really love the continuing write - and honestly all 3 are quite stunning - Probably some of my favorites from you! Great job!
A great write! The mind can see even in a comatous condition. Writing this, was in a totally comatic union with your pen....Keep-on dreaming for our pleasure reading your works of art.
I am really influenced and honored by your poetry sir.........
Wow. Wonderful poem. You are in coma like dream....Waiting for a sign..Brilliant write. No words can describe...
I am envious of your talent a brilliant write I will be going back to read all three again
your in a coma like dream inventing the world you see. a good write
Another good one Dave; an amazing and wonderful story you have spun for us...thanks!
Dave, here at number 3, I wasn't expecting the ending although it does make sense as per the cycle of life and alternation of generation. As a series of poems it also reminds me a bit of the great British TV show Life on Mars, which is a good thing. Thanks for the journey.
This poem has not been translated into any other language yet.
I would like to translate this poem
Haaaa...this is the good continuity :) wow you really have travel time machine...please let me borrow for one day my brother, i want to see how long i can live hahahaha...: P one more time you did amazed me..so cool :) _Unwritten Soul