a metallic fish
in the celestial vault—
illusion of wings
Superb....Great metaphor, nice subject......10+++
I take it the ILLUSION OF WINGS is also an illusion. When thew airplane's physical image is re-imagined as fishlike and swimming on a vault, it doesn't need wings! It's no longer an air traveler, but a water-traveler. But it's just a metaphor that pretends to change reality.
Great Haiku.... In the cerulean heights, the airplane is like a fish in the deep blue waters!
Brilliant imagery. Airplanes in the sky resembles a fish with outstretched fins.
Exquisite way of representing the plane as a (metallic) fish that vaults in its waters, that is the celestial space. Of course as a fish it needs no wings, what we see as wings is an illusion.
What a great concept, 'metallic fish'. Illusion is perfectly addressed in this powerful little poem!
Oh Dear! how beautiful is your wonderful world? You are not only writing poetry, but living poetically too, Excellent
illusion of wings ........................ amazing poetic phrase
part 1 / You are one of the few poets who can preserve the poetry of the text in short and long texts as well, same as T S Elliot, here in this haiku in every line we see an analogy that increases the value of your work Aesthetically,
brilliant juxtaposition, the plane is the metallic fish that flies, loved it :)